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[LittleMelon18]

Two scared Hands of possession:
Always clinging tight
On a broken-winged sparrow.

[POMF=3]

@ The Voice of Reason: That poem was purely out of musical inspiration. It took me awhile to piece the bits I wanted to convey so I don't know if it would totally count as Impromptu... but thanks for noticing it =). I was starting to wonder if my poems didn't resonate with anyone but I'm glad there are people that enjoyed them =D

noticed not many people give feedback here, good or bad.

[「黑風影」]

Two scared Hands of possession:
Always clinging tight
On a broken-winged sparrow.

Short and sweet =)
Possiveness sure is scary =\ The harder the grip the more the claws dig in even. Dragging the sparrow that cannot fly no more down with it.
Hope I didn't misunderstoo the message.

@ The Voice of Reason: That poem was purely out of musical inspiration. It took me awhile to piece the bits I wanted to convey so I don't know if it would totally count as Impromptu... but thanks for noticing it =). I was starting to wonder if my poems didn't resonate with anyone but I'm glad there are people that enjoyed them =D

noticed not many people give feedback here, good or bad.

I guess Its because poetry is like any art; there will be people that like, dislike, connect or don't understand at all, everyone is entitled to their own opinion.
Some people may be sensitive to critiques and doesn't want their work to be commented upon. While others just want to put their work out their for the heck of it. The like button comes inhandy in those situation.
I'm just happy if a person might have had the same feelings that I had when I write a poem or understood the intended meaning behind it.

Edited by 「黑風影」, 26 January 2012 - 07:40 AM.

[LittleMelon18]

@ The Voice of Reason: That poem was purely out of musical inspiration. It took me awhile to piece the bits I wanted to convey so I don't know if it would totally count as Impromptu... but thanks for noticing it =). I was starting to wonder if my poems didn't resonate with anyone but I'm glad there are people that enjoyed them =D

noticed not many people give feedback here, good or bad.

I think the purpose here is to share poetry. Give some compliments and advice if necessary. It's just an appreciation thread...^^ I don't want to scare any people away if they want to share some poetry. All is welcome! Don't be scared lurkers!!

Two scared Hands of possession:
Always clinging tight
On a broken-winged sparrow.

Short and sweet =)
Possiveness sure is scary =\ The harder the grip the more the claws dig in even. Dragging the sparrow that cannot fly no more down with it.
Hope I didn't misunderstoo the message.

Nope, you didn't at all!

[Equiliz]

Because it's the day of poetry:


As fear filled your eyes
As fear filled your heart

All this pain
Pain

Rivers of unspoken blood
A colorful illusion

The automated self destruction
It has begun

[LittleMelon18]

Hold it! I haven't explained
what I did not do
for you may thought I have done.

EDIT:

I actually just realised I wrote an inverse haiku. :/
7-5-7
not
5-7-5
xD

Edited by LittleMelon18, 05 February 2012 - 02:52 AM.

[Katzen]

Hold it! I haven't explained
what I did not do
for you may thought I have done.

gotta love haikus <3

lemme try (and horribly fail)

the rain keeps on falling and
my tears never stop
because i have lost your love

derp :/

[LittleMelon18]

Hold it! I haven't explained
what I did not do
for you may thought I have done.

gotta love haikus <3

lemme try (and horribly fail)

the rain keeps on falling and
my tears never stop
because i have lost your love

derp :/

Oh yeah....xD

Nice haiku attempt!

[Xbox User]

I'm not quite good at rhyming
But I am quite good at signing
Actually thats a lie
I just wanted to say hi
With my horrible, horrible rhyming

Its a limerick.

[ryvrdrgn14]

I'm not quite good at rhyming
But I am quite good at signing
Actually thats a lie
I just wanted to say hi
With my horrible, horrible rhyming

Its a limerick.

I was glad to hear that you could sing out a song
Then to my shock you proclaimed it was a lie all along.

There is no need to lie
If you just wish to say hi.

Twisting facts for the sake of attention is wrong.

~ * ~

Whatever the reasons may be
Each person has secrets to hide.
Learning to understand and see
Can let us set differences aside.
One fib won't offend.
Might you come join us and
Enjoy these verses and prose 'til the end?

[Xbox User]

I think you have misinterpreted my line
What I really cannot do is sign

My friend you misunderstood
I can sing quite good

However I cannot sign a single line

Please there is no need go ballistic
I am really not that narcissistic

But I apologize for lying
I'm just terrible at rhyming

For you see I am just not that artistic

[ryvrdrgn14]

I think you have misinterpreted my line
What I really cannot do is sign

My friend you misunderstood
I can sing quite good

However I cannot sign a single line

Please there is no need go ballistic
I am really not that narcissistic

But I apologize for lying
I'm just terrible at rhyming

For you see I am just not that artistic

Each line of your verse, my eyes did traverse
In my mind each word was formed.
Letter by letter, each one linked together
All too quickly so the meaning deformed.

How sign turned to song, oh it all went so wrong
Yet this fault is purely my own.
I'll do better next time when I read through your rhyme
And I meant no ill will with my tone.

[Xbox User]

Each line of your verse, my eyes did traverse
In my mind each word was formed.
Letter by letter, each one linked together
All too quickly so the meaning deformed.

How sign turned to song, oh it all went so wrong
Yet this fault is purely my own.
I'll do better next time when I read through your rhyme
And I meant no ill will with my tone.

We all make mistakes, it is true
I can see how your eyes deceived you

What your brain put together
From the words of my letter

You should have been careful to review

In the end, we learned something new
Me, not to lie and you, to review

If we could be friends
After this ends

Well that would be swell too

Edited by Xbox User, 27 January 2012 - 08:48 PM.

[ryvrdrgn14]

Words rise like the sun

Confusion fades like darkness

A new friendship dawns

[Xbox User]

It seems I have made a friend
Now I have a message to send

Let's keep rhyming
With some proper timing

We can keep up this poetic trend

Edited by Xbox User, 30 January 2012 - 06:18 AM.

[Autumn]

Rhyming
Rhyming

Something I haven't done
For a while.
Is inspiration gone ...?
Is what in my head lies.

[Angelo.]

last girl i slept with had curves like a serpent... had the beauty of a mermaid... her skin was really soft and smooth and as we held each other tightly i could feel her whole body vibrating on me.... her lips were so sweet and soft wen we kissed i felt a sensation iv never felt with any girl... it almost didn't seem real my head was spinning and i felt like i was dreaming...but in the end she was just another girl to relive me of my loneliness...

[Liar]

In the dark, I lay awake
Not a sound, not a quake
From afar, the clock blinks red
I cannot sleep in my own bed

The cold air filters into my sheet
I shiver, I sigh, I want to eat
Time passes slowly by
Perhaps this is how I die

[「黑風影」]

Bell tolls for it is time
the dark will be sentenced under the judgement of light

Bounded, Shackled

each step gain is another degree lost
What was given, what was deny

do not forget for all would be revealed

To everything, To nothing

seeds of sin bloom only to perish
Cannot return, Cannot escape

cast away your shell of humanity
Purity of the soul, Corruption of the mind
ignorant innocence is the marking of unheard cries
Drown in despair, Yearn for hope

curse fate or count your blessing for there would be no after
Retribution for forgiveness
A silent hymn of lament shall lead the way
At eternity's end you shall be saved

Edited by 「黑風影」, 04 February 2012 - 10:58 AM.

[Olmond]

After a welcome so kind, saw this post.
Thought it was funny, thought I'd try it too.
Nothing came to mind, bad puns at most.
Now I feel like a dummy, oh boohoo.

~Time spent ca. 2 minutes. I'm quite embarrassed!