Edited by Viscoun, 21 August 2014 - 08:50 AM.
[OOC] Codex Regius
#101
Posted 21 August 2014 - 08:47 AM
#102
Posted 21 August 2014 - 08:56 AM
I'll tell you straight out, the RP is set in a more cartoony world, think less SAO and more in the lines of Kingdom Hearts. I understand you want a dark character, but it doesn't fit in the kind of setting I am envisioning, so it would be great if you could make the character more PG-13, As it is now, the theme of the character is unacceptable..
Okay, will try again.
Diab.
Bukkake/Gangrape doesn't make a character dark.
To focus your entire premise around rape is not only bad, it's disgusting to me as a person. I know this isn't my RP, but there's a multitude of ways you can change this. Especially since though Jod has given people a ton of freedom, it's not a good idea to abuse it. Especially when this is more of a lighthearted story.
A dark character has an antagonist that gives you chills, events that link together that drive your character to madness, or even tormented by mistakes of their past. Depression, anxiety, paranoia, these are qualities a dark character can embody. And While I think it's neat how you did the police reports, I really think another direction could be more preferable.
Umm, Sangre dear. I don't know what to say.
I saw 'Concrete' again a while back and that case had a deep impression on me. I am not implying it to simply apply the bukkake/gangrape attribute to subvert the story. It is what I believed that victim could have done had things and fate sided with her. If you you don't know off it, Junko Furuta was a big inspiration for my character and a reason why I retained the surname. Now that Jod has highlighted it to be a PG-13, I'll no longer be putting forth such a character.
As for the tips you gave to write a dark character. I thank you and graciously accept it. Back to the drawing board for me. Will try again. I hope X can wait a bit longer for a partner.
As for possibly hurting the sentiments of many involved, my deepest apologies.
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#103
Posted 21 August 2014 - 09:26 AM
here you go jod
(i'm co-GMing this by the way guys)
my character here (jod pls review XD):
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and then some example NPCs (will make some needed ones later):
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that should be it?
mmm, those npc's be fine
just a little correction, the total sub attributes should add up to the level of the ability, same for the weapon.
Speaking of which It seems I have forgotten to add gold to the cs...
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#104
Posted 21 August 2014 - 09:32 AM
Also, as Viscoun did, would it be best for us to divide attributes to the attack? Or is it just an optional thing that is not necessary
Edited by kiddeadpool, 21 August 2014 - 09:38 AM.
#105
Posted 21 August 2014 - 09:37 AM
A Work in Progress.
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Take 2, hopefully a bit more adjusted to the storyline. I think this more juvenile and closer to PG-13. I will not include gruesome details of her exploits when writing it.
Edited by Diabolical Rhapsody, 21 August 2014 - 09:37 AM.
If you have the time:
#106
Posted 21 August 2014 - 09:38 AM
he just replaced health potion with tree slave, they are effectively the same thing. You can have multiple weapons as a set, like twin swords and such, though attributes are halved in effect
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#107
Posted 21 August 2014 - 09:41 AM
Yeah it's just seems like a lot of stuff
And the level 12 weapon is ok now?
#108
Posted 21 August 2014 - 09:43 AM
Take 2, hopefully a bit more adjusted to the storyline. I think this more juvenile and closer to PG-13. I will not include gruesome details of her exploits when writing it.
Is fine, are the familiars a result of conjuration?
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#109
Posted 21 August 2014 - 10:34 AM
@DR- I know darling. I am sorry if I seemed abrasive, it's a touchy subject. So apologies if I seemed cruel.
@Jod- Guess what? I'm making character. Let the dance parties commence.
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#110
Posted 21 August 2014 - 10:37 AM
#111
Posted 21 August 2014 - 10:55 AM
Dunno if I'll be in any parties really. Who knows, my character is pretty special.
#112
Posted 21 August 2014 - 11:03 AM
#113
Posted 21 August 2014 - 11:54 AM
Oh look. I made a thing.
@KDP- Who knows, I mean I will be in a party, but Ubi isn't the type to stick to one group of people.
Edited by Sangre de la Rosa, 21 August 2014 - 01:39 PM.
#114
Posted 21 August 2014 - 12:02 PM
#115
Posted 21 August 2014 - 12:07 PM
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Oh look. I made a thing.
@KDP- Who knows, I mean I will be in a party, but Ubi isn't the type to stick to one group of people.
Hot dayum, Accepted!
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#116
Posted 21 August 2014 - 12:33 PM
I think I'm finished!
So. Um. Anyone want to work with Teysa?
She breathes fire! And is adorable.
Edited by Feisty-Pants, 21 August 2014 - 12:58 PM.
Me, according to a Hero:
#117
Posted 21 August 2014 - 12:51 PM
@X: I'll like to take you up on that offer if you are still interested. Though this time there will be two Zhao Mei instead of a Lei Zi-Zhao Mei pair.
I'm always interested in partnering with you DR! XD
Take 2, hopefully a bit more adjusted to the storyline. I think this more juvenile and closer to PG-13. I will not include gruesome details of her exploits when writing it.
I whole heartedly give my consent! After reading that, I've been thinking, that I should up Shino's age to match Nadeshiko, so it can lay credence to them paling around in the real world as well. All rich 'higher-born' people have other rich and 'higher-born' people to hang with, and our fathers/family could know each other. xD
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Oh look. I made a thing.
@KDP- Who knows, I mean I will be in a party, but Ubi isn't the type to stick to one group of people.
Reminds me of Sora from .hack//sign and roots (though, he is grown up in roots so nvm)
in the term of acting older but is actually younger. xD
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I think I'm finished!
So. Um. Anyone want to work with Teysa?
She breathes fire! And is adorable.
Does she fancy partying with 2 demons? If not....We'd love to have her in our party!
Right DR?
woo Joddy xD
With the points, It's safe to assume that an ability's level is every 5 points right? Was wondering if I did it wrong in my CS, might have to fix that bit then. Got used to Falling skies and the sun brigades way of doing that. xD
Almost didn't figure we could put more of less then a multiple of 5 into the abilities, so if allowed, can I alter the numbers somewhat?
Edited by I-Am-X, 21 August 2014 - 01:07 PM.
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The Epic Of X:
#118
Posted 21 August 2014 - 12:59 PM
#119
Posted 21 August 2014 - 01:02 PM
And this coming from one who wields a dragon avatar?!
Oh come on! We wont bite!
(We ojou-samas need a lackey afterall)
The Epic Of X:
#120
Posted 21 August 2014 - 01:06 PM
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I think I'm finished!
So. Um. Anyone want to work with Teysa?
She breathes fire! And is adorable.
Accepted!
Also a small announcement, if theirs some kind of quest or plot thing you want your character to be involved in, send me PM and we can work things out. I want this RP to be yours as much as it is mine. If you feel so inclined to make up lore or npc's and such, send it to me, I can probably find a place for it. XD
@X:
The general rule is number pts == level, though you don't really need to give it, its up to you.
Edited by Jodgod, 21 August 2014 - 01:26 PM.
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