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pdaangsakti21

pdaangsakti21

Member Since 25 Oct 2015
Offline Last Active Jan 25 2018 09:10 AM

#1743561 Monologues

Posted by pdaangsakti21 on 14 April 2016 - 02:52 AM

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next, convince your parents to let you take a dangerous job that takes place far away




#1736124 Monologues

Posted by pdaangsakti21 on 15 March 2016 - 06:46 AM

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flirt the next person!  :batoto_022:




#1736121 need a guiding hand

Posted by pdaangsakti21 on 15 March 2016 - 06:19 AM

oh, so that's it? i guess it's because of an old habit. been writing like that since elementary lol

 

thanks for pointing it!




#1734458 need a guiding hand

Posted by pdaangsakti21 on 10 March 2016 - 05:55 AM

thanks, as you said i have a very vast room to improve myself and i'm still on its corner. still a long road to go. as always, thanks for your feedback, that prologue is the 3rd total revision, with a hurried editing and checking (idk what's the difference between them, or proofreading lol) but yes, this version is the one i like the most. i will clean it and move forward.

as for the "bumpy" parts, i'm still troubled to make them smooth. maybe because of my way of thinking that actually skips to conclusions for most of the time? i know that i need to explain things, i guess i need to work hard fixing my bad [skipping to sudden conclusions] habit.

 

thanks for your thumbs up!  :batoto_004:




#1730329 need a guiding hand

Posted by pdaangsakti21 on 02 March 2016 - 09:09 AM

this is the prologue. tell me what you think, i need to improve a lot =p

 

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#1710358 need a guiding hand

Posted by pdaangsakti21 on 25 January 2016 - 11:55 PM

thanks for the help, i'll check them ASAP!

(need a bit of rest because i lack sleep from gathering data *sob*)

 

and yes it seems that you're right, i didn't look at the artsy corner section so i wasn't aware of the writer's club.

how can i move this thread there? do i need mod's help?