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#81
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@Wasted and X

 

Good and accepted, both of you. The changes are fine too, KDP.

 

@Misty and Mischief

 

Let me reply to your PM before I go over the CS, Misty. In the meantime, I'd greatly appreciate it if you could add spaces between the paragraphs of your bio. It's kinda hard for me to read all that.

 

As for you, Mischief, here we go.

 

1) Going to have to edit out the Fairchild family, because they're not a thing (you can keep the last name, but it's probably your mom's maiden name, and not magic-related). 

2) You will have to remove every single thing under your history. From Special Skills all the way to the bottom. All of it has to go, and replaced by the Other section.

3) The last part of your history has to be changed. It's very unlikely that with a childhood like Minerva's, she wouldn't have received any form of power or education in magic, and to top it all off, she can't go hunt her father down because if her father was at least an experienced magi, she wouldn't stand a chance as she is right now. So the history after her mother's death is going to have to be edited heavily.


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Been trying to post for 10 min, you have an ETA? Or are you waiting on certain RPers who have yet to utter a peep?
Oh and how about my PM?
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#83
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It should be the day after I update the other RP. That is the best I can give you (hopefully within the week).

 

Answered your PM.


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I added the spaces. Sorry about that, the paste from word apparently doesn't keep them. 


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It should works for me when I used my Lappy toppy
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Okay, Misty. Let us review.

 

So, the birthmark/tattoo thing is interesting, and I do like it, so let's keep it. However, some things in the background don't work in the setting, but that's why I'm here.

 

First off.

 

I really doubt a mage would work in the human trafficking business. All of them think they're too high for that.

 

When the authority came and raided the facility, were they cops or mercenaries? If you fix the above, you should probably go with cops (they're not the same). That said, there is no mage who works in law enforcement, so it's unlikely that they could tell she's a descendent of a founder. Also, most mages aren't generous, so if they can't tell you're special material (ala a lost noble), they wouldn't bother raising you.

 

So really fix the last part of the history.


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hmmmm what to do, what to do


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I believe I fixed eberything!


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Except your spelling. 


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Neber! 


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Edited by Vafhudr, 23 January 2015 - 12:22 AM.

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As old as country's history? That's pretty young :P

 

I read count's name as Benito Mussolini :D


I added the spaces. Sorry about that, the paste from word apparently doesn't keep them. 

 

If you just press enter once for new space in word the forum counts it as if you just started a new line.

Like this. 

 

You'll have to press enter twice for forum to see that there's supposed to be a space between paragraphs. 


Edited by ANIMA, 21 January 2015 - 08:41 AM.

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I might edit some stuff but probably nothing major.

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Just say the word if anything needs to be edited in or out. 


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As old as country's history? That's pretty young :P

 

I read count's name as Benito Mussolini :D


 

If you just press enter once for new space in word the forum counts it as if you just started a new line.

Like this. 

 

You'll have to press enter twice for forum to see that there's supposed to be a space between paragraphs. 

 

The man likes to think of Italy as a bit more than its most recent iteration. 

And you know that association is not without merit. The Count's philosophy draws on people like Giovanni Gentile and Benedetto Croce for his vision of a powerful Italy, as opposed to everyone's punching bag. 


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@Misty

 

Your human trafficker is still a sorcerer. He shouldn't be.

 

@Vaf

 

Well, it's exactly what I expected. Accepted.

 

@Rob

 

Your character is a bastard, and might as well be as bad as his stepfather. You should feel bad.

 

Accepted!

 

p.s. what's with everyone and making the dad the bad guy.


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p.s. what's with everyone and making the dad the bad guy.

 

No Idea, I was gunning for the mother but KDP said he didn't like woman being painted in a bad light.

So lame.


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What?! He's just misunderstood. He needs a fatherly figure to guide him. o3o


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Still working on my own...

Laziness + homework = Lateness. My apologies.


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No Idea, I was gunning for the mother but KDP said he didn't like woman being painted in a bad light.

So lame.

loving father evil mother it is


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Ooh, should do something for this.


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