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sampks

sampks

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#600316 VN, Virtual;Novel

Posted by sampks on 22 March 2013 - 05:20 PM

Hiya batotoes. I tried to create a story, but I don't know where to put it. So I put it here.

Feel free to criticize please to help me build an original, masterpiece story.

 

Chapter 0 : Triality, Escape the reality

 

<< Creating avatar... >>

 

<< SYSTEM : Type your VN First Name... >>

<< Caxel >>

 

<< SYSTEM : Type your VN Last Name... >>

<< Amm >>

 

<< SYSTEM : Would you like to have a family? >>

<< Yes >>

 

<< SYSTEM : We will create them randomly, is that okay? >>

<< Yes >>

 

<< SYSTEM : Choose your starter job : >>

 Student, Regular Worker, NEET, Comedian

<< Regular Worker >>

 

<< SYSTEM : Creating the world, please wait... >>

 

<< SYSTEM : Thank you for registering, welcome to triality, the second reality >>

 

 

"Guh, I have to start from a scratch. What a pain in the ass."

 

My starting point is in an industrial town, called Decembark City. I've been playing this game three months ago when this game got popular in my class.

All of the players of this game became addicted, simply cause it's fun. The goal was to make our self as popular as possible. 

 

 

"Can't help it, my last character ended up becoming a driver. Lame.."

"I wanna become something flashy like a hero or just a fighter in the arena."

 

"Knock knock. Honey, please wake up."

 

"Yes mom.." I walked to the door and opened it.

 

"Hey, I'm not your mom.." a beautiful woman was standing in front of me

 

"Haha, just kidding honey." I closed the door again.

 

"WHAT THE F*CK!, I HAVE A NPC WIFE?"

 

"No.. no.. this can't be happening. Damn you system!"

 

"...Oh oh, wait. Is it because I choose a WORKER?"

 


"Damnnnn....."

 

 

I had a bad starter character, I've kept regretting this new life. But I didn't have any money to buy a credit.

Credit needed to create a new character. So, one player could plays many characters.

 

"Ughh, I need to find a new wife. But I must divorce my wife first."

 

"Guh, Divorcing a wife always hard to process. Moreover, I can't find an actual player wife with my current job!"

 

"I guess i must find a suitable job in a <<World Board>> after all."

 

I decided to look for a job in the <<World Board>>.

Usually, a new player like me didn't required by a player who put a request in a <<World Board>>.

 

A new player can live by stealing, asking others, or by luck getting recruited by another player in his/her company.

 

In a World Board, There's F 'till SS rank job, just like any other games. SSS-rank job couldn't be found in the WB. It's been a year ago, this game was officially released, but just a few people who gets their hand in a S-rank job.

 

I looked at the WB, but I didn't find a F rank job. My luck's not with me today.

 

When I looked at the clock, it showed 07.34 AM. Time to go to school.

 

 

...

 

"Fiuh, at least. School's over."

 

"SORA!" a girl walk toward me

 

"Ah it's Fumi. Is it about Triality again?" Fumi's my friend in reality and Triality. She's a good girl and cute too. She's a fortuneteller in the Triality. A D-rank job.

 

"Well, something like that..."

 

"What's the matter?"

 

"Well, I want to quit my job. A fortuneteller didn't suit me. Yesterday, those slingshot masters kept hitting me, because I'm sucks."

 

"lol, keep going.." Her face looks sad, but I can't help but laughing.

 

"So I decided to look for a new job, and I find some."

 

"What are they?"

 

"Card Shop Business, Robber, Novice Hero. Choose one, and join me. Please..."

 

"Lame...."

 

"What? Those are the only job we can do."

 

"Actually, I have something in my mind... You can participate if you like..."

 

"And what's that?"

 

"Cheater and Gambler."

 

"You're going to use that skill of yours? I mean, you had a promise with someone not to be a cheater again?"

 

"Yeah, but I'm playing this game to escape the reality."

 

"whatever, stupid sora.."

 

"Well, let's get down to the business"

 

<to be continued>


 

Spoiler for chapter 1 :

 

"Why do you always create a prankster? Look for what you've done"

 

"I'm promise I won't lie and be a prankster again"

 

"THEN DO IT!"

 

 

....

 

"Why I have to recall that now, of all the times"

 

...

"Forget that Sora! Why don't you try using the new summoning app or just buy a ball to catch a monster?"

 

"Well, if I choose them then my story won't become original."

 

"What are you talking about?"

 

"You don't know Derpil Survivor and Moémon?"

 

"Like I said, what are you talking about?"




#598570 Can someone recommend me a good comedy manga?

Posted by sampks on 20 March 2013 - 01:28 PM

Sket Dance

Sakamoto Desu Ga?

Saiki Kusuo no Sainan

Beelzebub

One-Punch Man

Air Gear

Senyuu.