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[Zero King]

Burning Part 1

She gripped the bottle in her hands as she took drink after drink from it. Trying to drown out all the sorrow she saw every time she closed her eyes. The quote her mother used to say to her kept repeating within her mind." Everything will be alright" she hated that quote since nothing ever was "alright" in her world. As she sipped the last drop of the bottle, her body grew light and she fell onto her bed into a drunken sleep..........
Ali woke up the next day with a throbbing headache and longing to hide deep into the darkness. She left her room to walk into the living room, where she discovered her mother with her panties half way down to her ankles and a satisfied smile on her face.
Ali exhaled "Not again" as she covered her mother up with a blanket.
"Hey there" a deep raspy voice spoke startling her. Ali turned to see Jim, one of her mother's boyfriends. He stood there without a shirt letting his potbelly hang out in the open.
Disgusting she thought to herself as she ignored him to go back into her room. But Jim grabbed her arm and pulled her with enough force to knock her to the ground.
"you better answer me when I say something to you Girl!"
"Screw you" Ali picked herself up and tried to run to her room but Jim pounced on her trying to restrain her like he did to her mother.
"Stupid bitch, I guess I gotta discipline you like I had to do with that slut" he jerked his head towards her mother who still laid asleep.
Ali wouldn't become like her mother, she struggled and wailed at him with a deadly fierceness. He caught her left hand and forced it above her head as he unbuckled his pants.
"Stop!" she screamed on the top of her lungs hoping her mother would help her. No. She couldn't rely on her, she had to do this by herself. With as much force as she could into his nails, she clawed his eyes trying her best to rip them out of their sockets.
"Bitch" he grunted as his hands went to his face, seeing her opportunity she kneed him in his groin and pushed him away. Ali without looking back ran out the front door and just kept running for what seemed like hours. She didn't wait to stop, afraid he would find her. The only thing that matter to her was to get as far as away as she could.
As she finally reached the bus station, her mind was frantic and unsure of what to do. She reached into her back pocket where she kept her wallet but it was empty.
"shit" where was she going to go? Where could she go? All these questions popped into her mind. At the moment Ali just felt like losing it, she found the nearest wall and punched it as hard as could. She didn't care about the pain she felt as her fist hit the wall over and over. She only wanted an escape, a way out of this world.
Calming down she leaned her head on the wall and simply closed her eyes.
"Hey" she turned around slowly expecting the worst "Ali" she opened her eyes to see her friend Mark. Ali tried to rely what happened to her but she couldn't make a single word. He wrapped an arm around her "Don't worry, Everything will be alright"..
Now that see thought about that, maybe she didn't just hate that quote……

Edited by Zero King, 06 August 2012 - 05:00 AM.

[OchaMeido❣]

Zero-kun, is this another story? I think it is.... ohh my . you really do have a sense of the situation~
Not many people can describle how that person feel and you are writing in 3rd person from an girl's point of view

You already is writing another one? Are you going to writing both story or focus on one?~
Either way, I am Following you~^-^~

[Zero King]

Yes its another story, it has no connection to Hero... (yet.)

Thank you very much


I write like a manic sometimes, so i can keep improving.

[OchaMeido❣]

Yes, I wish you the best~

I am happy I am the first one to read it ~
I do wonder why the other didn't read it yet epesically your first one...^^''
If no one else post that you will be hearing from me I guess~^-^

[Maia]

Wow, Zero.... I...wow.

[Icee]

I'm liking your stories what with the dark feel for some reason >.< Niice :3

[Zero King]

Wow, didnt expect to have done it but here's Chapter 2


Burning Part 2



Ali and mark talked until they announced the arrival of his bus but before he left he slipped her enough money to find a “safe Place”. “Goodbye and Thank you” she said as she turned away.

“Ali, Thank me by living” He turned and walked away pushing the terminal door open.

She didn’t watch him leave, she couldn’t right now. She couldn’t show him the tears that flowed freely down her pale cheeks. Ali took a breath of air, to gather the courage to go on. Wiping away the tears, she walked over to the teller.

“May I help you dear?” her voice was sweet and her eyes filled with worry.

“um..Yes, I’ll Like to get out of here” Ali kept her head up with a plastic smile as she looked the woman in her eyes.

“Where would you like to go?”

“I..Don’t know just out of here please” She barely could keep up the façade. Her eyes started to swell and her voice started to crack…..

The teller looked Ali over before typing something into the computer next to her. Ali rubbed her eyes with her sleeve trying to hide it from the kind woman. The loud noise of shuffling brought her back to the outside world.

“Here Dear” she handed Ali a bus ticket “Gate 12, at 3pm”

“Thank you” Ali took the bus ticket before leaving the teller a smile that couldn’t even look close to real.

Her feet wouldn’t stop, she was just wanted to retreat from the woman’s kindness. She sat down on the furthest chair from the teller and started a fight within herself. It’s too much! Everything is just too much! Can’t you see she’s in pain? Can’t you see needs help? But she doesn’t know how to ask for it.

Please someone help me

No one is watching me



Ali was wrong, dead wrong….The rest of her heart sank into the abyss as…Jim walked into the room.

No..No..No…Nooooo! She pushed her ticket into her pocket and ran as hard she could into the women’s bathroom. Pushing the door open, she found a stall and slam the door shot locking it with shaky fingers. She sat down on the toilet seat with her head on her knees rocking back in forth. Please don’t let him…

Jim’s big burly body busted through the door with enough force to shake the stalls. “I know you’re in here Ali”

He checked the first stall, empty. He checked underneath and couldn’t see her feet. “Come on out Ali, I just want to talk darling”. He pushed the second door open, it was empty her could hear him swear under his breath.

“You’re testing my patience you little whore!!” He roared

She couldn’t stop shaking her mind was gone, her hearts cold and beating fast.

He pushed the 3^rd door open, empty again. “Come out now! I swear it’s going to be painful for you” He rubbed his crouch with a sick delight.

Time was up, as he reached the fourth door open it wouldn’t budge. He found the crack on the side of the door and whispered “Found you dar-ling” with a wicked grin………

Edited by Zero King, 06 August 2012 - 05:01 AM.

[Maia]

Omg.
so intense.

[OchaMeido❣]

eh??!?!? ... How does Jim know where Ali is?!?!?? O.O *shock*~~......

[Zero King]

Rewinding time to another's perspective shortly after the goodbye....

Ring ring ring ring
"Well?" Jim's burly voice showing no patience asked

" Ali's at the greyhound bus station on E street"

"That bitch!? Thinks she can just leave does she. well she has another thing coming"

This guy is unbearable..the caller thought to himself

"Just remember your promise" the callers voice said with a smile

"Yeah yeah, you can have a piece of her when I'm done with her"

"Make sure you don't mess her up too bad"

"I can't guarantee anything my friend ha aha" Jim's sadistic laugh even sickened the caller so much he ended the conversation

Taking a sigh a relief the caller started to walk away from the station with his bag in hand.
He only looked back once "Life's a cruel joke isn't Ali"

...mark said before walking away

Edited by Zero King, 12 August 2012 - 08:43 AM.

[Maia]

Oh man, what a total jerk!
I mean, seriously, how can anyone be so fuc-


Anyway, I can't wait to see how she kicks Jim's ass.
Or, hopefully someone comes to help her, like the ticket seller.
Or something!

[annihilator]

Zero.. if you allow Ali to get raped... i wont forgive you....



no really... its just too much..


but i wont get in ur way of ur story... ^^
nicely done!

[Zero King]

Sorry I was late with this, I lost my disc drive that had the new chapter of burning on it. So this chapter I just wrote without thinking about it. Hope you like it!

Annihilator: thank you and don't worry

Maia: I hope this won't disappoint


Ali's heart stopped as Jim started to ram the stall door with his shoulder.

"Come out Ali I promise I won't hurt you....too bad"

She couldn't hear but she knew what he wanted and Ali would never let that happen.

How? How? Can I.....

Ali noticed she could roll to the other stall and make a break for it. But would he catch her? Will he force himself into her?

STOP! I have to stop, it can't be like this. I can't hide, I just have to go.... Ali thought to herself

With a deep inhale and exhale she jumped down to the ground and rolled to the next stall. She stopped and waited to see if he noticed. No...to be safe Ali rolled to the next stall, pulled the door open and ran out of the bathroom never taking a second to look back.

No one seemed to care when Ali was running through the bus station with a 245 pound man running after her while screaming of the things he would do to her. All the sexual things he would do to her and what he would force her to do to him. It was sickening, she couldn't let him do that. She wont be caught, she couldn't be caught. But...she stopped and turned around to see her tormentor slump over a chair breathing hard.

Ha...ha...ha..hah..hahah she laughed!

Ali Laughed! She laughed so hard she was crying

It wasn't an I almost got raped laugh or a sad laugh it was a freeing laugh.

"I can't believe I'm running from a man like you"

"Ha.ha.ha just wa.it bit..ch..I..."

"I'm not waiting for anything you fat bastard"

With that she turned around to walk away but with a bit of the energy he had left in him. Jim grabbed Ali's arm and tried to pull her down to him.

"Let go!" Bammmm~ she gave him the hardest punch she could throw but it barely fazed him enough to make him let go. Before h could grab her again, Ali jumped back just in time.

"Dam it that's enough!" Ali grabbed the chair closet to her and just kept hitting Jim with it. Dispute the rage in her heart, she was laughing in her head. Jim the man that torments her is holding his up and cowering as the chair connects to his body. It was just too marvelous...

She was blind in fury she just saw him and the chair. She saw the blood spewing from his head, it was sick and tormented but she wanted to see more. It was not to be, she felt a warm hand on her shoulder pulling her back. The teller from before, held Ali back and repeatedly said "its alright baby its alright you can let go now".

Ali struggled but the tellers kind words stopping her. The chair fell to the down and Jim lowered his hand barely able to see what was happening.
" its alright baby, I'm here for you now"
The teller turned Ali around and held her to her chest. It was warm and welcoming.

Why is she doing this? Why is it so warm? Is this what its like to have a mom?

Her thoughts kept her wary but they were washed away as the teller whispered in her eye

"It's alright, let it out"

She couldnt believe it, why ..is this woman so warm? Ali pressed her face against the woman's chest and cried and cried

It felt so good, to let all her sadness fade away. So good she didn't notice jimmy limping out of the bus station just to be stopped by security. You should have seen his face, but do you really care to see? Ali doesn't, at the moment she's letting go of everything....


Don't worry we're not yet

[Maia]

OMFG I LOVE IT!!!!!
SERVES THE BASTARD RIGHT!!!

[Zero King]

I'm glad you do Maia

It took me a while to write it, I have to write a few more chapters

Edited by Zero King, 30 August 2012 - 04:58 AM.

[Maia]

Well, theres a certain satisfaction I get from reading that last chapter.

Spoiler

Spoiler

Spoiler

nothing like seeing someone like him get what he deserves.

Edited by Maia, 30 August 2012 - 06:06 AM.

[Frost]

I think I'm reading your stories in the wrong order Zero lol oh well they're all separate stories anyways.

You're really good at writing these dark stories lol, the bathroom scene was almost like something out of a horror movie I could imagine flickering fluorescent lights and Jim's footsteps as he checked each stall...intense.

Spoiler

And I got a kind of thrill from reading about Ali smacking the shitt out of Jim, guess we all have a dark side O.O

Edited by Frost, 30 August 2012 - 04:26 PM.

[Maia]

Zero-kun is really good at writing his stories.
Its not hard at all to visualize what is in the story, or feel the emotions of the character.
Especially in this one.

[Zero King]

Thank you Frost and Maia

[Spoiler] I'm glad both of you liked jim getting his ass whooped by Ali [Spoiler]

Could someone teach me how to do spoiler box?


Also frost you should read my story Hero

Edited by Zero King, 01 September 2012 - 05:48 AM.

[Frost]

Thank you Frost and Maia

[Spoiler] I'm glad both of you liked jim getting his ass whooped by Ali [Spoiler]

Could someone teach me how to do spoiler box?


Also frost you should read my story Hero

haha just add a / in the second spoiler box like this: [*spoiler]...[/spoiler*] just take out the *

I definitely will :], there's a bunch of stories in here that I need to read, been a bit distracted lately >.> lol