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like the story and concept, but....


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makuta2

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author treats the reader like a retard and explains everything. half of every chapter is him/her telling us what happened. a good story teller should be able to do that without explicit words explaining the convoluted mess that he created with plot holes.



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hunterxhunter does the same...