Hello, fellow writers! Today, I have an unfinished short story that I was writing for a contest about a year ago. The story went past the word limit though, so I stopped writing it and submitted something else. Looking back on this story, I'm really curious to know how it would've ended, but I can't remember anything specific.
I only have a few hints and the portion of the story that was written. If it interests you, tell me what the ending should've been for this story!
The only hints I have besides the actual piece are these:
- The document's title was Out Time. But, rather than a title, I think it was just the first few words I could think of that related to the story somehow.
- I remember thinking that I would give up on this story because it was nearing the word limit, but the actual story was only about halfway done.
- The girl and the boy would meet again at the end, although what state they'd be in, I can't exactly remember.
- My tendency for stories differ depending on my mood, but for serious-sounding stories like this, it usually ends tragically. However, I had been trying to write unexpected endings when this was written.
- The Institution's full title was related to the main point of the story.
- The second half may have spanned over a large period of time.
- Although I wrote love here, at the time, I had been more partial towards love not in a romantic light, but more like inseparable people (and not necessarily because they want to be either).
- The person the boy went off to meet at the end was some sort of historian.
Anyways, that's all I've got. And no, I don't believe the numbers had any real meaning to them. If you have any questions or clarifications you want made, feel free to ask.
***
The building was spotless. It was almost eerie how clean everything was. The Insitution of Defection Control and Aberrant Regulation lived up to its reputation as one of the top scientific research facilities currently in existence. No doubt this cleanliness was necessary for maintaining consistent conditions and keeping environmental variables to a minimum. Or something like that. Anyways, it was pretty cool walking through the place and seeing your reflection directly underneath you, as if a mirror world was flowing from your feet. The lights were always bright, so bright that everything looked softer and smoother.
It was afternoon and I was wandering through one of the many hallways in the Institution. There were doors everywhere, to the point that it almost felt like a maze even though the hallway was just a straight shot forward. Even though I had come here dozens of times already, I still had to look at the signs on the wall to find the room I was looking for.
"451-208," I muttered, making sure that the numbers on the sign matched. How many times had I done this? I couldn't even begin to count, but it never felt familiar. I twisted the knob and opened the door, letting myself in without even knocking.
"You didn't even knock."
"I know," I said, pulling up a chair and tossing my bag onto the ground. The girl sitting in the bed, her long brown hair standing out from her white gown, her white sheets, her white room, was glaring at me as she always did. I had an excuse for this and she knew very well what I was thinking. I had explained the idea to her many times.
"You might be changing someday and I wouldn't see a thing if I waited outside."
"That's the point!"
"That's a tragedy," I had said, shaking my head. I wondered if she actually remembered the conversation or if she was just glaring at me because she knew that I was thinking about it. I could never tell what she was thinking. She was too different from me. Girls were hard to understand.
Well, then again, people are hard to understand in general.
"Want an apple?" I said, digging into my bag. I also took out a small knife and slid off the cover. "I'll peel it for you."
"You don't even know how to peel an apple," said the girl, frowning. I shrugged and tapped the apple with the knife.
"Can't be that hard."
I'd seen it on TV. You just take the knife and slide it underneath the skin. I don't see why it's so hard. All you have to do is make sure the knife is deep enough that the skin doesn't break. I rotated the apple as I skimmed along its surface, feeling prouder and prouder as the peel slowly got longer.
Even though it was easy, I didn't feel safe having the knife so close to my hand. So, I focused all my concentration on peeling the apple, making sure I didn't lose any fingers on the way. The girl just stayed in the bed, watching me every now and then, but then laying back into her large, fluffy pillow and closing her eyes. The sun was coming into this room, so it was even brighter here than it had been in the hallway. That was good, since I could see the apple peel clearly and I didn't worry as much about chopping my hand into pieces.
"There, done."
I put the apple on her sheets and started to gather up the peel. It really was long. I almost wanted to take it home and hang it out my window.
"You suck," said the girl, holding the apple up.
"Hey, that's uncalled for. I just gave you a beautifully peeled apple."
"You just gave me the core. You cut the whole apple off with the peel!"
I took the apple from her hand and looked at it. It did seem a bit thinner than I had imagined. But no, I had peeled it perfectly. It couldn't be because of my technique. Probably this apple was just smaller than others.
"You're an idiot," said the girl, biting into the apple. She grimaced and swallowed reluctantly. "It's sour."
"That's good."
"I hate sour apples."
"Learn to like them. They're good roughage."
"What are you talking about?"
I took another apple from my bag and bit into it. I didn't really care if the peel was off or not. They say the peel is good for you; loads of fiber and stuff.
Instantly, I coughed and spat the bit of apple out of my mouth.
"Ugh! Gross! This thing's so sour!"
"Don't spit it on the floor!"
I decided that maybe today just wasn't the day for apples. I put everything away into my bag and then pushed the girl over on the bed so I could get in. It was sunny outside, but the room was always chilly.
"You're taking up too much room."
"It's so warm," I said, snuggling into the sheets. If you could bounce into a sun-kissed cloud, I think this would be what it'd feel like. The girl sighed and turned away. "Hey...uh..."
What was her name again? I never could remember. We had known each other for so long, but I still couldn't get a hold of her name. I wracked my brains to try and come up with something, but all I drew were blanks.
"What?" said the girl, her voice muffled by the pillow. Well, whatever. It's not like names were important.
"It's nice today, isn't it?"
"Then get out of here. You're bothering me."
"After I took the time to come here! I even gave you an apple!"
"It was sour," mumbled the girl. The nerve of her! So ungrateful. I really don't know why I came to visit.
"Hey, let me see your number."
"No-stop it! Don't touch me!"
But, it was too late. I had already shoved the sheets away and turned her towards me. There it was, floating above her chest. A bunch of numbers and colons.
"It's lower," I said. I had these numbers over my chest too. But unlike hers, mine were green. In fact, everyone's were green. Just hers were red.
"Of course it's lower," said the girl, pulling the sheets over her again. "Yours gets lower too."
"Yeah, you're right." Everyone's numbers were getting lower. They started from the digits on the right, then went leftwards. Down down they went. But, everyone's numbers were really high. So high that I thought they'd never go down all the way.
But hers were getting there. Hers were the numbers closest to zero in the entire world.
"I wonder what's going to happen when it hits zero," I said, laying back against the pillows. The girl tried pushing me off the bed, but I was too strong. Sighing again, she finally gave up and just bounced back onto the pillows, next to me.
"Me too," said the girl, looking up at the ceiling. "They said everyone's numbers are going to hit zero eventually."
"But you're first."
"Yeah."
"Aren't you excited?"
"Sort of. I don't know. I feel weird."
"Weird?"
"Yeah..." said the girl, closing her eyes again. "Really weird."
"You are weird."
"Shut up."
I rested my head against her shoulder. She stiffened at the contact, but didn't move away.
"I think I love you," I said, closing my eyes. I could feel the heat from her skin against my cheek.
"Then stop giving me sour apples."
"No. They're good for you. I give them to you because I love you."
"Go away," said the girl, taking advantage of my lowered guard and kicking me off the bed. I landed on my side with a thump! and rolled over onto my belly.
"Ow..." I got up, rubbing the sore spot on my hip. Really, what kind of person would do that to someone who just confessed his love? Even if I had done it twenty times already.
I tried getting back into the bed, but she had the sheets clamped tight underneath her body. It didn't take me long to give up, and since I had nothing else to do, I zipped up my bag and slung it over my shoulder.
"I'm going then."
"Mmhmm." She didn't even peek at me from under the covers. I moved the chair back to the wall and went to the door.
"I'm tired today," said the girl. Her voice sounded faint, like the shadow of a breeze. "I think I'll feel better tomorrow."
My hand hovered over the knob. "Ok. I'll come back tomorrow."
"Don't bring me apples."
"I'll bring grapefruits."
"No!" The girl started coughing, shaking violently under the sheets. Sheesh, that's what she gets for not getting her Vitamin C.
"Grapefruit. You need it."
"No, I don't."
"I love you," I said, opening the door.
"...Me too." I closed the door behind me with a snap. I think that was the tenth time. She was saying it a lot more lately. I wondered if my feelings were getting through to her.
"I guess I can compromise."
Most people don't know it, but strawberries have plenty of Vitamin C too.
***
"Hello there! You're looking chipper today." A man with tufts of silver hair on his head was striding towards me, his hands nestled in the voluminous pockets of his white lab coat.
"Hi. Are you heading to 451-208?" I asked. He was the head of the Institution and the person in-charge of the girl.
"Yes. Need to hurry and conduct the check-up, I'm running late as it is," said the head.
"Late? Isn't it still sunny outside?"
"Not at all. The days are getting shorter, dear boy. It'll be dark soon."
"Oh. I didn't notice." As usual, his numbers were glowing bright green against his chest. Even though he was supposed to be older than me, his number was a lot higher than mine. I wonder if it was because he was part of the Institution. It was a scientific research facility, so he probably had a chance to mess around with his number.
"How is she doing so far?" I asked. It was pretty much the only thing we ever talked about. I suppose it was only natural that I'd get acquainted with the head, having come to the Insitution so many times already. I didn't really know what to say to someone like him; I mean, he was in-charge of the entire research facility. I always felt sort of stupid whenever we talked, even if it was about something simple like breakfast.
"Very well. There are some interesting things happening as we get closer to zero," said the head, rubbing his silver beard. "It's quite fascinating really. There's almost, what I'd like to say is, a transformation happening inside her body. Everything's going through some kind of change."
"Really?" I wondered if that meant she was going to turn into an alien or something. Well, not that I'd really mind, since I'd never met an alien before. But then again, maybe I would mind. Aliens could be gross. I really had to think about this for a bit.
"Yes, yes. Very interesting. We're making detailed observations. The first Zero of our society, quite exciting."
"Has there ever been a Zero before?" I'd asked him this many times already, but I kept forgetting the answer.
"None that I can recall. Hitting zero was a theoretical quandary, quite frustrating really. But now that we're in the Zero zone, we're starting to see all sorts of groundbreaking discoveries. Yes, yes, very remarkable."
"Is that right...?" I said, feeling my eyes wander aimlessly. Now that I had finished talking to the girl, there was no reason for me to be here. I was impatient to leave. But, as usual, the head's defenses was proving impenetrable; there was no crack to exploit.
"Why, just a few days ago, we noticed something very strange about her cellular structure. Or, rather than the structure, the cells themselves. Can you believe it? Several of them have stopped dividing. It's incredible, quite astonishing-"
I was defeated yet again. It pained me to have to surrender for the umpteenth time, but it was a pain numbed through experience. I swallowed my pride and raised my voice ever slightly:
"I'm sorry to cut you short, but I have to be somewhere-"
"Yes, yes, apologies. Didn't mean to keep you along, quite tactless of me." His tone shifted, changing from the ecstatic, almost bubbly gush into hurried, callous speech. He patted me on the shoulder and walked away, a smile that was more like a forced muscular phenomenon floating past me.
I felt a pang of regret, as I always did, upon his departure. This time, however, my heart was lightened a bit by the fact that I truly did need to be somewhere.
It was getting dark already. Like the head, I was running late.
Edited by watsu, 08 October 2013 - 07:14 AM.