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[oninn]

Ahhh, ahhhh, ah-ahem. Good day, or should I say "Hello"? I'm a noob at this, you see, so I'll start with my introduction. And some people are saying that my style of writing is weird... Well, I think that its true.

For now, I'll ask a very stereotypical question: What will you do if you yourself become a God?
Just think about it.

Please don't click the spoiler thingy below.

Spoiler

PLOT:

Maria is just a boy(yup, boy) that you can spot on any corner of the street. In other words, he's perfectly normal. Or you can even say that he's commonly normal. No special traits, no special talents, no specialty for anything.

One day, he looks for a part time job since Christmas Holiday is coming. He finally acquire a job but to his surprise, his employer is just a little girl who acts like an adult and speaks that she is a God. Surprising him further, she suddenly grabs his collar and declares that he too can become a God if he wanted to.

Is she really saying the truth?

Choice -01

Spoiler

If you can become a God, what will you do?

I’m sure I asked myself something like that in the past.

Remembering that phrase, I got too hyped up, huh. Seeming like that question is for geniuses and greenhorns alike, I just randomly posted a question scribbled on a torn-off piece of paper lying around my room.

If I myself become a God, what will I do? I’m sure my old self will jump in joy and use his powers as he pleases. He will use such great powers for personal use and obtain infinite possessions, since the past me are obsessed with material things.

But now, what will I do? If such chance to permit me to become one, what will I really do?

I don’t know the answer.

Maybe I will protect everyone and care for everyone, and if some unknown problem persists, I will save the world from peril ---I won’t say such beautiful and exciting words.

If I become a God, I may destroy the world unconsciously. In other words, the moment I become a God will be the end of human civilization. The end of humanity.

The end.

The Armageddon.

The omega.

Everyone will perish.

Everyone will die.

Everyone.

Including myself.

Because I,

Hate myself the most.

That’s why, if anyone asks me what will I do if I become a God, I won’t answer it. Instead I will reject it. Rejecting will become the “automatic answer”.

Instantly.

I will reject it.

So fast that a fast ball will pale in comparison from it. Or something along those lines.

Whatever, talking about something like to become one (God) is impossible in the first place. I’m sure that there’s not even a 0.01 percent chance that you can become a God in a blink of an eye.
Well, you can’t become a God even if you accept quests from NPCs^[1] and complete them with an ‘S’ or if you met certain conditions like killing a legendary dragon or two. Life is not an RPG that you can change classes if your experience points become 100.

Therefore, you can’t say that there’s a chance for people to become a God.

You can just say that it is an impossible event.

Zero over a hundred, a thousand or a million. Or even one.

No chances of happening.

Impossible.


-In this world, having an impossible event is impossible-


I watched some anime with that concept in their beliefs. FMA^[2], was it? Many anime are in fact are fully based on the RL, and some of it are a total shit. Actually, I’m not saying that the creators of that works are shit; it’s just that that their what so called work of art are a total worthless shit for me. A total worthless piece of shit. (Should I pack my things for now and prepare to get arrested or something?)

Okay, now I’m making the whole introduction a little awkward. Earlier, I’m talking about what will I do if I become a God but now I’m talking about shitty shit that will make you puke when you watch it. I’m too troublesome, huh. Realizing how petty and how shameless I act towards other people and making unorthodox piece of shitty (I really like the word shit, do I?) introduction, I guess this will become my debut work.

Or maybe my path towards oblivion. I cannot say what will really happen because even if it is stated in the bible, toran, or even comic books, no one can actually say that this or that will really happen or not.

Go with the flow, you see.

I’m such a useless piece of meat, aren’t I? Or maybe I’m just a masochist? Or maybe I am the destined one that will save the world from peril… Hey me, please stop that ridiculous act of chuunibyou^[3]madness. I too am getting depressed with my dunce self.

So now please enjoy yourselves and hate me from now on.

I’m begging you. Don’t even try to like me. Or else I may destroy you.

Since if I became a God, the first one that will experience hell would be me. And you’re probably the next in line.

For now, I’m logging out.



-LINK OUT-^[4]


Author’s terms
[1] Non-Playing Characters; RPG terms
[2] Full Metal Alchemist reference
[3] 8^th grade Syndrome
[4] Sword Art Online reference

Fuuuu... I don't know but if you read the prologue... You can say that it is somewhat predictable but I'll make this exciting and add more comedic scenes next time. Okay, now scroll up and click the other spoiler. Ku ku ku...

Edited by oninn, 29 January 2014 - 07:43 AM.

[seyrine]

I clicked the spoiler thingy, but I can't draw out a comment so far since it's only the intro of sorts. It does sound very interesting. I'll look forward to what happens then.

[pizhhh]

I'm confused, sorry. Are you asking for our opinion on what we would do if we were God, or is that question just the theme of your story? Or.... both?

[seyrine]

I thought the question was more of a "setting the mood" kind of thing instead of it being an actual question. xD Is it a real question to be answered?

Edited by seyrine, 26 December 2012 - 03:14 PM.

[Travesty]

Interesting idea. Not entirely original, but I'd like to see what comes of it.

Edited by Travesty, 30 December 2012 - 09:44 PM.

[oninn]

You don't really have to answer. At least just think about the question instead. And just like seyrine said, the question was asked to set the mood of the readers.


For now, I'll post the 1st part of Chapter 01... (For some reason, the name of the chapters for now would be "CHOICE XX", I don't remember why I decided this but I think that this will work, for the meantime at least.)

Choice 0

Spoiler

My name is <Zerchs>. And I am a college student at a known engineering school that is supposed to be on the main city. I am currently 19 years old.

I’m a normal college student. No. I’m just a normal college student from a typical and corrupt country. Just a normal college student.

I was just leisurely living my own life. A laid back, err, it is not really necessary to call it a ‘laid back life’ since college exams and professors are kinda hard to deal with but I can at least endure it and say that my life is ‘oh sooo satisfying, I’m gooood.’

I’m not that smart, you know.

By the way, since I am a healthy 19 year old boy, some of my friends say that I’m quite a pervert and a lecher. Really, what hypocrites are they since they’re just a lecher and a pervert like me. They just say what they want to say but that doesn’t really matter to me. I’m quite flexible and understanding so I can forgive them and reply “Oh, well. I won’t deny it since it is true” and shrugs my shoulders and put on a poker face.

Humans are really hard to deal with. They always wanted to step on other’s weaknesses and bring down other’s dignity. In reality, people always brings problem to other people. They are a troublesome bunch of conceited apes that think and put themselves on the spotlight even if they has push the person who’s on it.

That’s how troublesome they are.

That’s how troublesome I am.

My mother once told me that I, his son, should become a person who becomes the solution to the problem for others. And of course, I should not give problems to other people as well. For me, that statement is laughable.

Look, humans always give trouble to anyone.

Even if they don’t want to.

That’s a fact.

Sometimes, no matter how hard you try not to cause a problem to a person, you can never pull that off.

That’s a fact.

Your existence can even be the cause of misery to a person. That’s a fact. Even your correct choices can become a problem to a certain person.

That’s a fact.

Your patriotic achievement can give a problem to an unpatriotic person.

That’s a fact.

My hypothesis is that only a ‘God’ can never cause a problem to anyone. To everyone. To me.

In order not to cause trouble to anyone, you must become perfect. No, you should be perfect from the beginning. Not to become perfect but you are considered as perfect from birth. And the one who’s in that category is what we called God.

I am a Catholic Christian. Yeah, that’s right. In paper, that is. I believe that there is something or someone who we can call as God but many people nowadays just blurts out ‘God this’ and ‘God that’ and they’re so freaking annoying. I hate it. People who just spout about God, ‘who he is’, ‘what he is’ and ‘where he is’ are really brave and kind of idiotic at the same time. I know. I know. I’m quite the devil and a bad person when I’m compared to the so-called Popes and Bishops but look, do you really need to waste your time on a missionary school and study all about the bible? Bibles can be forged! Hello!? Are you listening? Bibles are considered as the word of God and many people believes that it is. At some point, I too believe in it but there’s no really need to base your life on the bible. They say that God gives us intellect so that we can choose our own path. And I chose my life not to depend on a book and believes on what I think is right. I own my life. So I will be keeping it. Also, many people consider themselves as the messenger of the Lord and they spread the word of God but in reality, they just say that ‘Hey, you’re not in the same religion, right? Therefore, your religion is wrong and you will be damned and will go to hell if you don’t change your religion soon. Ku ku ku…’ Well, almost all of the religion out there does the same so I won’t complain very much on Catholicism. Yeah, Buddhism, Shintoism, Muslim, Zoroastroism and all sorts of religion is like that. More likely, the people under those religions are the one to blame. Not the religion itself.

To summarize, humans are the one who is behind for all of those unfortunate and annoying circumstances. Ahhh, my head hurts just thinking about it.

As you observed, I’m an evil person. Surely, that’s because you look at yourself as some holy being for thinking that all of what I had said are wrong and you yourself is correct. That’s your point of view, right? That’s what you believe, right? That’s what you want to believe. Don’t worry, I won’t complain nor will rebuke your conclusion. Let’s just say that you are correct. Or maybe, you can consider now that you are correct. So what? The position of ‘correct’ and ‘incorrect’ changes from person to person. Your ‘correct’ may only apply to you.

I am a normal student. But may not be a normal anymore.

I write this not because I want to, but because I need to.

To the people who read this short message, I wish for you to open your eyes. Open your minds. Open your hearts. Enlighten yourself with the truth, not with the lies of other people.

Believe in what you call the <reality>.



…is what I had read on a random blog. His blog site is kind of eerie, and the font style of his words is like some kind of a horror setting you’ll find in a haunted house. You sure you’re not joking?

Overall, I think that it is decent enough to review and look forward to his next whining blog report.

Looking at his writing, this author’s style is very similar to my own. Perhaps that’s what I want to think.

And most of his view points are really similar to mine. About this and that about humans.

Truthfully, reading other people’s blog and knowing other’s opinion is my hobby. My secret hobby, should I say.

Getting bored of what we call “the everyday life”, I indulge myself on researching blogs and forums in the net. Feeling that someday, I may find something interesting. I’m really bored with my life, you know? I almost did everything that can quench my thirst for excitement. Sports, news, anime, manga, novels, literature and arts. I even browse on image board sites. I did not excel on everything but I’m not bad at anything, though. I just tried my best not to get bored but as soon as I make myself to be occupied with these things, I gradually lost interest in all of it. That’s normal, right?

Not completely, but a part of me is shouting that <I’m not contented with this!>

I’m still an otaku, if you ask.

A closet otaku, if you ask.

That’s what my older brother told me.

Break time is almost over and I finished my lunch earlier than expected. Fortunately, the person beside me was absent so I can use her chair as I please. I placed several things in there so that none of my classmates can drag that chair anywhere. Nothing to do, I browsed my phone and searched the net for stories and blogs of other people.

Feeling like I’m some kind of a protagonist who for whatever reason that my chair was exclusively placed near the window, I unintentionally look outside and spot a large, colorful and star-shaped lantern. Oh crap, I almost forgot that it is almost Christmas. I don’t really give a damn about it, the holiday called Christmas. It’s just an event where people gather and celebrate “God’s birthday”. Many people don’t even know the true essence of this holiday yet they still celebrate it since everybody is excited on its arrival. Actually, I too am hooked about this holiday when I was young. I believed in what they called <The spirit of Christmas> when I was still an elementary student. I trusted that what my parents said that Santa Claus, the long bearded guy in his red pajamas exists. He will climb down from the chimney and would secretly place our desired gifts in those large and red colored socks. But as I grow up, I finally realize that that was just a fraud. A lie. A white lie. Even so, I’m mortified by it. I realize that they use the idea of Santa in order for us to grow closer and gave us something to look forward to.

Reminiscing about that memory and feeling is nostalgic but something of that caliber won’t affect my thinking right now.

As I continue to fiddle my phone, the person in front of me suddenly turn her head to my direction.

“Then you should find a girlfriend.”

“…huh?”

I tilt my head to the side as I become surprised at her remark.

“You’re bored, right? Why don’t you find a girlfriend?”

I frown as I realized what she really meant.

Reina Crowell. 17 years old. Female. The same class as me. Honor student. Semi blonde hair with a short hair. Glasses. Serious, to a fault. Smart. Kind to everyone. Bright personality. Cute. Absurdly Cute with a nice body. You could even take note of her two large bosoms. She is too perfect, that you could even compare her to a fairy.

Or maybe that of a devil.

Really, am I breaking copyrights here? Feeling like I’m some kind of a main character from a monster story, I’m stealing his introduction about her friend he described as the class rep of all class reps.^[1]

Anyway, I know that Reina is absurdly bright but I did not think that she would even guess what I am thinking right now.

“It’s all on your face, you know.”

She said.

I just smile silently. I was seen through, huh. Thinking like that, I just brushed it off and made a comeback.

“You mean I’m handsome, right?”

“… Pffft…”

“H-Hey, what’s with the rude laugh? Are you putting some mud on my face?”

I’m somewhat confident that that will make her speechless for several seconds. To think that she would laugh at it. I even made a <make a check mark with your hand and put it under your chin> pose as a catalyst.^[2]

“No, no, I was just surprised. The you of the past will never make a joke like that.”

“Hmmn, now that you’ve said it, you’re right. Wait, about me being handsome, I’m not joking about that part!”

“I know.”

Smile.

She’s smiling. I don’t know if I’m being belittled or not but I get the feeling that I’m being made fun of. She, who somewhat knows my past self, can easily get to my weak side so I should be careful.

Anyway, I’ll just brush it off again. I’ll go back talking about her first suggestion.

“Crowell, you seem to be misunderstanding something,”

I should press this topic so that there will be no unnecessary misunderstandings later on.

“Yes, I AM bored but that doesn’t mean that I should find a girlfriend.”

Seems to be interested on my defense, she stands up gracefully and spins her chair, facing to my direction and took a seat.

Making a delighted face, she begins to move her cute lips.

“Oh, really? I can see no particular reason why you should not find a girl.”

What do you see, huh? And don’t smile like that, I might steal a kiss from you.

“There are many reasons. I’m quite picky and very meticulous about choosing who I should go out with. She needs to be a high-class lady and will love me even if I don’t take a bath for a week.”

“Hmmn, I understand but that’s really gross. Please remove the ‘I don’t take a bath for a week’ part.”

“Er, o-okay… If you say so…”

Of course that was just a figure of speech. Actually, the true reason is that having a girlfriend is too troublesome. I’m not Usui Takumi^[3] but I guess similar reasons do exist in here. And I don’t have many friends in the first place and I’m not planning on expanding my influence. I’m contented with my human relations for the meantime. I am contented with that excuse, I mean.

“Remember Reina, it’s just a matter of when. It doesn’t really matter on who will I go out with, if she’s a high-class lady and if I feel like it, I’ll just have to rely on my instincts. Get it?”

With this, I can finish this topic with ease and start a new conversation with her. I’m pretty sure that she will let me off the hook this time. If our classmates hear our conversation, the thought makes me want to hide my face with a paper bag.

After a long pause (while staring at me), she finally ask a question.

“Okay, then if someone who’s a high-class lady in this school will confess to you and if you feel like going out with her, you’ll say yes, right?”

“… If only there IS a high-class lady in this school. And I doubt that will even happen in RL. That situation is possible on anime and dramas on TV. No, it’s only possible on anime and dramas.”

“Ummm… RL?”

“Real Life.”

What’s with her, pestering me like she has an ulterior motive?

Look, I was only lying. If you want to see a high-class lady, just look at the mirror. I’m sure you’ll definitely find her. The high-class lady that we’re talking about.

Reina is incredibly popular with this class. No, should I even say the whole school?

Her dynamite body and well-endowed proportions (please look at her breasts) are out of this world. That’s only my opinion though, I don’t know what the others think of her. And I don’t want to know. Maybe half of the boys’ population here in class uses her as a fap material.

Or maybe everyone in here, including girls.

She has that kind of body.

She has that kind of erotic body that even girls may look at her with that intention but I did not even once thought about her like that ---I don’t want to use such beautiful excuse.

I did lust about her body several times. But thinking about it right now is not the appropriate time.

“I see,”

She said.

“then should I volunteer myself to become your girlfriend?”

She said, while smiling.

… …

--Ha?

I was dumbfounded.

No, I should say that I am extremely shocked.

So shocked that I can’t even speak a word. So shocked that it leaves my mouth hanging.

Turning my head to the side, I hastily check if there’s someone who heard her astonishing remark.

…

Oh shit. Since her voice was so sweet, some people in our class were secretly listening in our conversation right now and accidentally heard her confession (is it really a confession?).

Looking at their expressions, they too, are shocked.

I move my gaze at Reina who was still smiling. Perhaps should I take it as a joke? But if she’s serious about it then I may hurt her feelings. No, I WILL hurt her feelings if I take it as a joke. That’s should be inappropriate, right? Right? Right?

“Ummm…”

“So? What do you think?”

Hey, how do you think I will respond? Shall I make an excuse?

---Sorry, I’m only interested in 2D girls.

That’s not even worth considering! And there’s no responsible butler who had a debt of 150 million yen that will respond like that even if he was confessed to by his former classmate!^[4]

I made up my mind and breathe in some air.

“I’m sorry, b-but I don’t want to date someone yet. Moreover, I d-don’t want to date someone with h-half-assed feelings.”

I explained. I planned on replying without stuttering but my throat it so honest.

“Hmmm, is that so? Hahaha,”

She simply – laughed it out.

“that’s a good answer! I never expected you to answer my fastball like that.”

Tap tap.

She’s actually tapping my shoulders. I just can’t seem to understand this girl, she’s too hard to read. Or maybe I’m just too shallow. Maybe it’s the latter that’s true, assuming that I am a dunce.

Sigh. I can’t help but to do a facepalm.

“Still, to bluntly reject my confession… Idiot.”

“Er, what? Did you say something?”

Eh? Did she just frown? It must be my imagination.

“N-No! Nothing. None at all!”

She said while waving her left hand swiftly.

“You don’t need to deny it with 3 different words.”

The class will soon start, should I finish this conversation promptly? Ah, now that I think about it, she’s the only one in this room that I can reach out my hand with this kind of request.

“Anyway, are you free later?”

Time to change the topic for now… Let me ask her first if she can accompany me to find something that I need right now.

“Ha? Wha-!? … A-Ahem, why are you asking me that?”

What’s with the surprise?

“Well, since it’s almost Christmas, I need to buy a present for my family but the problem is that I have no money, so if you can, please help me find somewhere I can find a part time job.”

I made a request since she’s the only one I can count on. Though, it is inappropriate.

“Hooh, is that how you make a request?”

“W-wha, what?”

“… Do you really want me to spell it out to you? … ”

Huh? What’s with her? Normally, she would occasionally agree with me quickly but I guess there’s a time like this when women likes to be pampered. Women are creatures of the opposite sex which are complicated and are hard to comprehend. I guess this is what they called “tsundere-ing”.^[5]

I purposely straighten my back and then bow my head deeply.

“Oh my so beautiful Reina Crowell, please do me a favor and help me with my problem!”

Shit. Sometimes, she makes me do some embarrassing things. Well, I can’t really help it though. She’s the only one I can count on.

“Hmmn… Okay. But you really don’t need to bow your head like that…”

“I see. I won’t do it again.”

“Yes, next time, please do a kowtow^[6]in from of me.”

“Wait, isn’t that worse? No, that’s the humblest form of a bow, right!? I didn’t even make a 90 degree bend!”

“Ehehe…”

She just laughs it off again, but more importantly,

So… So cute!

With that, the teacher finally arrives and starts his mathematics lesson.




Author's Notes

• [1] Nekomonogatari Kuro reference; This is how Araragi described Hanekawa Tsubasa in the novel

• [2]

• [3] Kaichou wa Maid-sama reference

• [4] Hayate no Gotoku! reference

• [5] Nisemonogatari reference; Remember the scene of when Araragi was handcuffed by Senjougahara?

• [6] http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kowtow

This was the only 1st part... It's quite long but it's worth to type since I enjoyed reading it... It make took me several hours or days to post the 2nd part but... oh well, what will happen will probably happen.

Edited by oninn, 31 December 2012 - 01:03 PM.

[pizhhh]

I was smiling the whole time, but I giggled on this part:
"(please look at her breasts)"


Really good.

[oninn]

I was planning on drawing Reina since she was a likable character and more importantly, I like her. (Drawing a big breasted girl is kinda arousing, even for my part...)


Err, my grammar is horrible so there's a big chance that I made a grammatical error or two... I don't have an editor and I lack friends who are patient enough to listen to me wholeheartedly so if you think that you can help me with my errors... Uuuuuu...

[oninn]

Like I've promised... Here's Reina Crowell. It only took me 20 minutes drawing her...

Spoiler

[Travesty]

Mad props. Drawing is good, story is good, what's left? This guy will wait in anticipation.

[oninn]

Oh, I was nervous and worried if there's anyone who really read my work this time. I really need some feedbacks right now (I prefer bad remarks) so that I can pinpoint my mistakes and improve further.

Arrgh, keeping up with ya people are hard and exciting at the same time. Please leave a reply, I'm begging ya, Ahahaha! Of course, that was just a joke but really, leave a reply if you can.

Holy crap, I became a troublesome man and someone who asks favors to anyone.

Shall I post the Part 2? I'm currently making a name (read Bakuman) for the manga edition. I'm inexperienced though because this was the 2nd time that I'm drawing a manga.

[pizhhh]

I neither have the skill, knowledge nor the qualification to critique people's literature, but since I really enjoy your work and I would like you to continue, I'll try giving my thoughts about it, just to give you a bit of motivation. (I'll try to be as negative as I can).

First, like you've pointed out, there were a few noticeable grammatical errors, but honestly I didn't really bother me. I was probably too hooked on the story to mind. I guess if you want your writing to be more professional, that would be a problem, but it doesn't really keep people (well, ME personally, at least) from enjoying the story much. (Please don't ask me for help on correcting grammatical errors. You'd only end up with more of them.)

Secondly, there were times when the narrative drifts off to your (the writer's) own thoughts/beliefs/philosophies, masked as the characters' thoughts/beliefs/philosophies (Those big paragraphs come to mind). Maybe it's only an introduction to the characters' thought process, or maybe they will be important plot points later on, I'm not sure. I don't really know if that's a bad thing, since for me, it's part of the stories' appeal, and I've seen similar styles on works like Haruhi (and indeed it's quite common).

Third, I really like how you put pop culture references and group/explain them at the bottom, like how wikipedia does. It's the first time I've seen this style in fiction. Maybe I just don't read much. Meh.

Anything more I'd wanna point out?...... hmm, nope. I think that's it for now. I could always just edit/make another post if I wanted to point something else out.

And yes please, I'll be waiting for the second part.

[oninn]

I... I really was dumb founded because I, myself was surprised at the pace of this story. In my opinion, the development and conversation time was long. It's not that I'm not contented but I really want to post the 2nd chapter (Choice 1) of this story here.

Anyway, here's the part 2.

Choice 0 - Part 2

Spoiler

Ding dong.

After my imaginary bell ringed inside my head, I close my textbook and start packing my things. I’m not a model student and I hate studying but I carefully put my things inside my bag because I love anything paper related things such as books. That’s why I always take care of it, anything paper related things such as notepads and books. Oh, did I just repeat myself unconsciously? Oh well.

Anyway, since the final period has ended, I got up of my chair and approach the large breasted woman in front of my seat.

Hey girl, do you want me to rub that two beautiful lumps in your chest right now?

“Hey, are you thinking of something perverted?”

Like a teacher reading a book, she easily grasps what I’m thinking with the snap of her fingers. At least that’s what it looks like to me.

“N-No… Not really. Anyway, are you ready?”

“Uhn, just wait a minute.”

We agreed on going out (literally) after school to help me find a part time job since my negotiation skill is almost zero. Thankfully, she agreed on my plea and was now tidying up her things. Looking at her notebook, I can see her neat handwriting and fully loaded notes that contains almost everything that we discussed so far. I can even see some notes that were not even in the board to help her remember the difficult parts of the discussion. Heh, how diligent.

After putting her things inside her bag, she gracefully stands up and looks at my direction. After that, she opens her mouth gently and said,

“Then, shall we?”

“… … Let’s go.”

Why!? Why everything that you do is so graceful? My heart may stop beating, you know!?

I’m not in love with Reina but just being with her makes my heart beat like crazy. It’s like the BGM while being with her is <Killing me softly> . What the heck?

As expected, many of our classmates are staring at us while we’re talking together. They seemed suspicious about what’s our relationship with each other. Just friends? Lovers? In a Master-Slave relationship (with me as the slave)? I don’t know and I don’t want to them to know. For me, Reina being near is enough for me. It’s quite complicated and a selfish feeling but that’s what I feel right now. The hell, I don’t care about what other people think, I only care about what Reina and what I feel right now.
Making a frown right now, I subconsciously let out an “hmph” and ignored them. I thought Reina would do the same but she just smiled bitterly and went to her friends and said goodbye since the path towards the door was occupied by them. She really is like a class rep of class reps. I simply followed her while making an annoyed face.

After finishing her goodbyes, we finally got out of the room and start walking slowly unto the corridors.

My heart was beating loudly as we walk beside each other. Sh-Shall I took the initiative and grab her small hand? No, I should not just do that since I don’t have the right to hold and enjoy her soft hands.

Breaking the silence, she brings out a small notebook with an adorable design and mumbled,

“Okay, this day… Alright, noted.”

“What, what are you doing?” I asked hesitantly.

She is scribbling something on her notebook and while doing it, her face brightened up like a sunrise. Just looking at her makes me cheerful to some degree.

“Nothing much. I’m just writing about your debts about me.”

“HA?”

“This is not the first time, right?”

“Err, wha-? Please elaborate.”

“You’ve asked me many favors, right?”

So, it has come to this, huh. I definitely knew that this time will come but it’s too soon! Accepting my requests so that you can use me as a prize in the future…

“I have always listed the date, the contents and the difficulty of each of your requests in this note,”

She slowly lifts up her right hand near to her face and then,

“that’s why I call this… the <Debt Note>.”

makes a peace sign horizontally beside her right eye.

“You don’t need to go that far to crack a joke! More importantly, why should you keep a notebook just for that?”

She hesitated on answering my dumb question first but after a few moments, she said,

“That’s… for blackmailing.”

“Blackmailing!? Are you serious!?”

I replied with a shout.

I didn’t expect that word. No, I never once thought that she will use that word in her entire life. I believed in you, Reina. I thought that you’re the epitome of pureness and cleanliness but to hear you say that word is just… Wait, it seems that my character here was getting more of a delicate human. That’s the result of having a weak heart, I guess.

“Yes, and for your information, this was the 1000^th time that you had asked for my help so I think this is the right time for me to inform you that you owe me 1000 times, got it?”

She… She actually counted it to 1000, how worrisome and admirable at the same time. If, if I don’t accept her reasoning for now, my pride as a man will diminish at an unbelievable rate. Assuming that I have they what you call “pride”.
“… Alright, alright. But,”

Of course, I’m not a Yes-man. Before accepting defeat and agreeing to the winner, I would always set a condition in order to protect myself from being outsmarted.

“let me see that notebook first.”

Hearing what I’ve said, she stops walking and said,

“I… I refuse.”

I look back at her, making my face look like some sort of a confused guy but I know the true reason why she refused my condition. It’s because, simply because she was – a girl.

I have some delicacy and I am considerate to other people, and most likely if it is a girl. Girls are treasures, you see. And treasures should be taken care off with extreme cautiousness…

“Well, if you say so…”

After that conversation, we just continue to walk silently until we got out of the school.

The school that we’re attending to was near the shopping district and the park. A normal setting for a high school compared to a school that was above a hilltop where you need to climb it while your teachers are leisurely using their cars to ignore that ridiculous slope^[1] nor a school that was located on a man-made island just south of the Rainbow bridge, with a land area of 2 kilometers from the north to the south and 500 meters from the east to the west, where the so-called “Buteis” were being brought up.^[2]

Those kinds of schools are too ridiculous. I may even die if I was enrolled in that kind of particular school. Therefore, I don’t wish to be in that kind of school. But, if I can go through the other dimension and go into Konata Izumi’s place^[3], I won’t think twice on going there. Loli in sailor uniforms are the best.

Thinking about it, walking on the shopping district with a girl like this is pretty embarrassing. I can even see other people staring at Reina, since her breasts really stand out too much. Or maybe I was being a paranoid?

We continue walking slowly and quietly for some time. For me, I won’t describe it like “Oh, walking with her like this is a dream! I can die happy now! It’s a bliss!” since describing our time together will end up me using my right hand later so it’s a no. Definitely a no.

After 20 minutes of walking, we finally stop at a front of a bookstore. An eerie bookstore that seems like there’s a force that would pull you into that building and there’s a two small children with weird hairstyles and a tall lady that spouts hitsuzen this and hitsuzen that.^[4] I don’t want to be like Watanuki who needs to work like a maid in a shop like that without being paid.
I scratched my head, feeling that it is some kind of fate that I saw this building, and ask her without turning my gaze from it.
“… … So, this is it?”

I continue my appearance like I’m some kind of a gigolo, because I read in Sankaku Complex that there’s a certain technique that you’ll bewitch a girl if you intentionally stare off on something and that you’d make you look sentimental. I want her to fall for me like she was like some kind of a character from a certain galge but I think that my effort was for naught since she just ignored my pose and just looks at her cellphone in a serious way.

After nodding several times, she finally looks at me calmly and said,

“Nope, this way.”

“… …”

After that, she resumes walking like she did not even see the bookstore but I can feel that we will eventually go back to this spot. Is this some kind of fate? Or I’m just imagining things again? But actually, seeing that there’s some kind of shop like this is kinda refreshing.

Timidly, I follow her and starts walking in a fast pace in order to catch up to her.

After catching up to her, we go into several kinds of shops in order for me to apply for a part time job for 2 hours straight but like the wheel of fate was making a shit out of me, it turns out like I’m cursed or something. I don’t want to describe it any further because it was really depressing.

Depressing as if my save file on my PSP was corrupted by some external cause.

Of course, I was not the only one that was dejected. Reina too was depressed because of skirmish for this day is a failure and predicting what she’s thinking now was too easy for me. She’s down because of the invalidity of her attempt to shackle me within her grasp.

Failure means that my “debt” should not be counted as a success and that would make her 1000^th debt collection was just a dream.

Or so I thought it is.

It should have been invalid.

But she said,

“We’ll continue this tomorrow!”

In a worked up manner.

So, it was decided that we’ll continue this pointless search tomorrow, huh.

I just scratch my head, unwillingly to accept her offer but I can’t refuse it, can’t I? I am the one who asked for her help so I should not complain.

“Y-Yeah. Thanks for your hard work, I guess?”

With my response, she just smiles at me and wink her left eye,

“Well then, I’ll be going now.”

And then, she left. Finally.

I look up unto the sky, still wondering what should I do for now.

Looking at my wrist watch, it’s still too early for me to go home. It means it was just 5:30 PM. Two and a half hours more, huh.
“I guess I can loiter around here… …”

And then, I turn my head to my right side…

“Eh? Wh-”

What is this? Is this some kind of a joke?

What appeared on my sight was the eerie bookstore that we passed earlier.

“Hmmm… … Maybe I can search for porn mags here?”

With that intention, I entered the bookstore without a second thought.



Author’s Notes

[1] Suzumiya Haruhi no Yuutsu reference

[2] Hidan no Aria reference

[3] Lucky Star reference

[4] xxxHolic reference

I know, I know, the tension and the excitement level on this chapter had subsided. Moreover, I haven't sleep for a day... zzZZZzz

EDIT: Yosh, will post the next chapter silently (maybe tomorrow or next week?)... I'm so sorry that I am a failure of a person.

Edited by oninn, 04 January 2013 - 12:11 AM.

[oninn]

Oh, since I've draw something like "Oh, why don't I draw something like a fan service drawing or like that to pull more readers?", I'll post it here so that you can look forward to the next chapter. The spoiler below will contain a drawing of a character for the next chapter that I will post in the near future. Yes, it's because that I am busy editing Choice 1 that I was kinda late posting it here... b-but, it, it's not l-like I'm posting it here f-for you, okay? (An exquisite tsundere display?)

Spoiler

[oninn]

Without further ado...

Choice 1



Part 1....

Edited by oninn, 29 January 2014 - 07:54 AM.

[pizhhh]

New character?

[oninn]

Er, well... wait for the next update. I'm sure that the new character (maid?) will surely appear.

[oninn]

AHHHH... here's the continuation. Sorry for the long update. I'll just post 3 pages okay?


Continuation: (Choice 1)

I'll continue it tomorrow since I'm dead tired...

Edited by oninn, 29 January 2014 - 07:51 AM.

[oninn]

Continuation again. Wait, isn't this a depressing novel? (It became a comedy from out of nowhere... Wahahah!)

I'm busy editing this novel and there's so many pages that I need to scanlate so if I ever finish the Song 3 of Ridley early, I can finish the choice 1.

Edited by oninn, 29 January 2014 - 07:50 AM.

[oninn]

I'll gonna update this thread every Friday so watch out.

Spoiler

Meh, what's with this awkwardness? I feel like there's no one else who's keeping an eye on this thread 'coz no one ever leaves a reply or something... Anyway, I was just editing the choice 1 earlier and then I suddenly remembered a notification on my FB group that I should start writing a story for a visual novel (in that group, there are 4 writers, including me and we're practically helping each other on the plot but now we're focusing on creating a story that would be the main route of our visual novel... I don't think I stand a chance but I should try my best for now since I want to improve my way of becoming an immortal being... Yep, writers are immortals if they do spread their works and their names would be posted on wikipedia or something similar but that was just an assumption. Really, what the hell am I talking about.)

Since I enjoy reading gag manga, I'll continue on making this a comedy novel with gore and bloody scenes. Yay!

Edited by oninn, 08 February 2014 - 02:56 PM.