Nephlim

the backgrounds in the second chapter are very good, but im not so fussed on the character art. it reminds me of a magic the gathering comic thats out in the UK, the art style is similar. the colours are good, add a whole new dimension the the manga and the story line is intriguing. some of the english isnt 100%, just needs a quick read through before its published. all in all, i really like it, followed

Thank you all so much for the feedback, we will be taking some things into consideration for the Next issue. Thanks for reading it, there is a lot more pages on our website. We had to replace the artist from Issue 1, the new guy is a wonderful man named Gerald Forton. He was in the Animation Department on He-Man cartoon and TMNT. That is why you can see the art is very different! He hasn't done much manga but he is giving it a go because he loved the story. We also picked up a colorist named Nicole Graham from the UK which I think elevates the book as well. Anyway thanks for taking the time to read it through there is alot more art and story info on our website as well.
Feel free to look it over in website post. Thanks again.
Jordan

that guy's a fake!
though i'll still read about him, it's interesting to finally see some self published manga here. i hope you'll manage to develop your style well as the story goes on, looks like you have some potential

.... What the hell was that?

Not bad, but... thick. Full color is always nice, but the wide array of colors combined with the complex art makes it muddy and confusing. The walls of text are a huge turn off as well. I get you're trying to build a universe, but god DAMN the characters need to shut the hell up! Speech is silver, silence is gold.

Somewhere in between the art in chapters 1 and 2 would really be ideal.

Other than that, I'm diggin' the story line! I'm not going to be condescending and say "oh, I know where this is going," because I don't, and I'm excited to see how the story progresses.

well the art certianly has changed

I'd like to comment on the pacing. Many of you probably think you know where the story is going to go but I can tell you its going to take a turn that you wont see coming. I have over 50 Chapters written and the tale is going to go places and incorporate things you cant tell from the first issue. Stay tuned I am working with my artist to figure out a way we can both continue making this and pay our bills at the same time. Thanks for the read and feedback!

Not too shabby. I kind of get where the story is going, but I think you could have did better for a debut. It seemed rushed. The story along with it's wording and the art as well. I'm not sure how the art was done, but smoothing out the lines would help appearance a lot as even the smallest squibbles stand out.
I also agree with the background issue, many times is seemed as if they were in the middle of nothing. The clothing detail is good, it's seems all medievel and magiclike, but it should blend with a developed background. And I think the eyes are given too much detail, such as the pupils, how they water and shine.
The angles should be experimented with as well. It looked a lot like there was jut profile and front views to avoid shading...which also could have brought out the art more.

It might sound bad, but I really did like this I just pointed out somethings that got to me, but might not stand out to others. I really do hope you continue the story and I look forward to seeing it progress and improve. Especially since it's in OEL.
You just got followed

Not bad. Its a work in progress and the plot seems too twisted and straightforward, but it has potential. However, it won't last long.

Art: 6/10
Some people were saying characters werent detailed enough and stuff, i think they are too detailed in comparison to background, making it look like they are standing in middle of nowhere. rather than focussing on so many lines in the clothing you need to reduce the lines to make them look cleaner and not clutter up the page. actually in art in general i think simplicity is the best, if you go and look at any picture, not just manga youll find they dont have THAT many lines per area, thats because it makes it look messy. the anatomy of characters wasnt terribly bad, it didnt look "OMG AWKWARD" but it wasnt great either. maybe practice drawing anatomy a bit

Story: The pace is a bit strange, is this a preview chapter to create hype? if it is its fine i guess but if this is the pace youll be at all the time i would say its too fast.

I feel that the pace is somehow... wrong, like it is progressing too fast, and that the art is currently lacking (as in too much blank spaces), but the problems are all things that can be improved through repetition and/or (even more) hard work. Good luck to both of you aspiring artists, I'll be paying attention as to how this progresses. Furthermore, it seems that this project is going to be interesting enough in the long run, so there is that, too.

it's a really good concept and story but the art is so lacking ... thinking that you really skiped drawing the background like walls and stuffs you would think the character's get really really detailed .. but no .... the art is really lacking

Thanks for the feedback everyone. Being the first I am sure me and Heather could learn a lot about what we can do better I am the writer and Heather is the artist. We will continue to do our best and see if we can make a splash in the manga/ comic world. I have another couple of Comics/ Manga that are in production with other artists that I will be releasing upon completion. I would love to hear feedback on those as well. Thanks!

Good story, but the art makes it look bad

Interesting concept but the execution is somewhat lacking.

Still, it is an awfully interesting concept.

It looks like Sid1ous is Jordan Troche, one of the makers.

Lol manga that illustrates bibleic stuff. Gonna read.

got that feeling too, and artwork isnt the best at times..... will keep my eye on this to see if it improves tho

sounds like diablo's back story