M.R.P.
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Author: | Jordan Troche |
Artist: | Eric Geronimo & Suman Deb Roy |
Genres: | Action Fantasy Sci-fi |
Type: | Other |
Status: | Ongoing |
Description: | Characters/ Players awaken in an unknown video game world. The world is very mystical and fantasy looking. Before anyone can figure out what is going on a portal appears and Lvl 40 monsters appear. They begin killing everyone and a stranger comes to their aid. |
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14 Comments
i thought it was better than most of what i read on here and do not agree with most of the criticism levied. english wasn't perfect at times and the dialogue could be more emotional. I think an artist should generally try to produce something that they can be proud of rather than something they think a certain subset of people will be able to enjoy.
First off, let's be completely honest here. A lot of the feedback on here is pretty considerate. Nothing is "bashing", nor has anyone really been rude about it. You have to understand the sheer quantity of talented manga/manhwa artists and authors that already have work on here. These individuals are actually offering a lot of really good advice.
However, you talked about bashing, so I figured I'll give what those other individuals didn't. A more blunt approach.
Even for free I feel like this is a rip off.
There's huge issues with cohesion in terms of plot. Within the first chapter I've already been greatly confused and had to re-read to properly understand what exactly was happening. This isn't helped by some of the repetition in the dialogue and just bizarre plot developments. We got from being thrown into a world, to fighting a monster, to some guy that looks like a pirate saving them to all the sudden class changing and boom. So much stuff happens that your brain tries to process it all and it just comes across as a jumbled mess.
The art itself suffers severly from proportion issues. Is that headband of the main character just supporting his hair? Or is his forehead that huge? Characters constantly change in shape and size and to be honest the whole thing looks like it was a rough draft that was outlined and colored.
Considering the fact that the entire thing smacks of a huge ripoff of anime cliches, mainly Sword Art Online and .Hack for the premesis, I get the impression that not a whole lot of time was put into actually refining the piece. This desparately needs an editor and a proofer.
There's potential here and I'm curious to see how it'll be going, but try to also understand that the harsher the advice, the more you can apply it to actually improve the product. Nothing is perfect, but that doesn't mean one can't strive for improvement.
I would argue that you guys should probably commit yourselves to some more practice and accept more feedback in order to improve and eventually create a quality comic. Take classes, submit to forums where you will get more constructive feedback, practice, etc. There is nothing wrong with having a style or having ideas that are inspired from anime/manga but don't let yourselves fall into the trap of confining yourself to a single style you must copy.
Even the most popular manga artists have a background in art and their placement of anatomy, stylized or not becomes evident. I understand that you placed this on Batoto to get some recognition and awareness from the community you want as an audience but it would probably work best to create a webcomic site as this is not a professional work and there is still room for a lot of improvement.
If a work is not up to par with the rest of the material on here, yeah, it's gonna stand out, and we'll criticize it.
The idea is sort of interesting but it's not something that people would recommend. The art isn't that bad but it's just the story that's bugging me and how it's told. I have eyes and I can see what they're doing, you don't have to tell what what they're doing when you could've told some background story behind the characters instead.
Poor decision making in a nutshell.