fine cows will be replaced by pigs you happy? just joking. awesome tips though (I never expected to receive such great and detailed feedback), and the main character's name is the thing that is most subject to change since I couldn't come up with a name that rhymes with demonica... and the foreshadowing of the demon was something I was unsure about putting but I guess I will put it afterall and maybe add something about how the MC family had an aptitude for magic or something. I will redo the whole descriptive sequence while trying to make it way more interesting (using your suggested way of writing it) and I will verify the whole grammar all over again (I finished writing this draft at 12 am and I was pretty tired that day) finally any suggestion for the name of the main male lead is welcome (though I prefer it to be easy to pronounce)
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