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Marian5390

Marian5390

Member Since 26 Aug 2013
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In Topic: Forget the title: Little orphan girl X deadbeat demon who takes her lifeforce...

18 May 2016 - 08:12 PM

Thank you both so much! ❤

In Topic: So, I'm taking a creative writing course...

03 February 2016 - 04:56 PM

I had to do something similar in a creative writing class a few years ago, but with a sky scraper instead of a barn.

When I figured out that your narrator was a cat I couldn't get Warriors out of my head. Talk about nostalgia.

 

@Emerald39: good luck with your novel. I've got one (kind of) I've been world-building for four years now. If you want advice or anything, feel free to ask. I guess that goes for anyone reading this, really. Just shoot me a message.

 

Not even gonna lie, it's totally the cause. xD

I read way too many of those books when I was little. Cats were all I could write about for a long time.

And don't even get me started on the (AT LEAST TEN AND PROBABLY MORE) unfinished ficlets of varying lengths laying all over my house and - unfortunately - scattered about the internet. They're all so terrible, oh gosh. I did so much roleplaying back then too... Holy crap, you've made me remember some terribly cringey things.

Though of course, when it comes down to it, it was all so much fun! I really did love that series. ^^


In Topic: So, I'm taking a creative writing course...

24 January 2016 - 05:24 AM

I absolutely love it

This is the motivation I need to keep writing my novel series

 

I was so confused when I randomly got more replies to this. xD

Nevertheless, thank you very much! ^-^ I wish you luck in your writing!

 

Well, as I use the dark forum theme, you've successfully managed to murder my eyes with your blue text. Even so, I enjoyed it. It feels alive. Hard to do without forcing the imagery.

 

Ahhhh, sorry, I don't remember why I used to do that. I still cringe when I see my old comments on things. xD

And thank you! I've actually been feeling quite down about my writing style recently, so that's really nice to hear. ^^

 

The only thing I can say (caffeinated and just after an exam, so I beg my pardon), is that the first description may be a bit too corny. But since that's practically its purpose, it's fine.

And I'll just give one piece of advice (although you are probaby aware of it, but hey, just in case): writing will not always be a piece of cake. Sometimes you're probably going to get reeeeally unmotivated. In that case, I recommend you to try selfmotivation, thinking about the good sides of writing until you get the crack. And, of course, discipline.

Sorry if I sound conceited .P.

 

Ugh, I reread it and it felt quite wordy. I noticed some punctuation errors (repeated occurrences of "it's" instead of "its") and other things that got past my initial five proofreadings too, some awkward word choices and such. Strange, because the last few times I reread this I was still quite fond and proud of it.

But, being able to critique and view new flaws in old works that I once adored only means that I've been improving, so I'm actually quite happy. ^^ And I'd actually say that was pretty decent writing for the age I was when I wrote it. I'm pretty satisfied. (I'm still going to edit the parts that bother me. xD)

--Edit--

I didn't edit it too much - wanted to stay true to the original. Nevertheless, fixed the possessive "its" error, the blue text, and a "so" that seemed out of place to me. ^^


In Topic: You are now married to your Avatar

23 August 2015 - 03:23 PM

*Reads title*

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Well, shit.