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TRXAcero

TRXAcero

Member Since 11 May 2012
Offline Last Active Feb 24 2018 03:41 PM

Close Encounter Of The Fairy Kind

13 January 2014 - 07:17 AM

Foreword

 

Well, ain't I an idiot?!

 

But of course! When you write something, you're supossed to do it in a safe text editor and not in the &%#@€ browser...

Enough of my ranting, I'm derailing myself.

 

This is not meant to a proper part of the story I'm writing, this is more a preview I'm writing so people can take a nice look on it and give a critique that gives me more a clearer view of my own ideas. The only person who I have shown this to is my editor, and he... well, he kind of scares me.

 

Feel free to criticize me into the depths of oblivion. If you believe I'm ripping off someone, please give me a detailed reason, my editor said in a joking manner but now I'm not sure myself.

 

Without further ado, here it goes.

 

Spoiler

 

And that's as far I 'll be writing for now.

 

As I said before, this is kind of a preview. The original story starts from the perspective of the fairy and keeps like that through the first chapters.

 

I wrote it from Aldebaran's(the girl on an errand and actual protagonist) perspective since I kinda want to try a different approach than with my editor. As the story goes it turns into a different genre and keeps on shifting. But as far as it concerns to this preview, is an action story.

 

Well, until we meet again, Osegueda off.

 

Edit:

 

Added a little chase scene. Things will get more interesting next edition.

 

Added some action. Next task: Get more action!

 

No action. Just dialogue and some names :/

 

More action! And I put everything into a spoiler since it reached 15 pages.

 

Extended the action scene right into the climax. Hit 7000 words mark.

 

And like that the story is finished at 10495 words. Thanks for your patience.