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I write poetry sometimes, I'm also co-wrote poetry with my cousin (it was hard). I'll put the lines she wrote in red.

Why Fight by ZK and Halen


These tears are real
I cant make them out to be fake
WHY CAN'T I hate hide all this hate
Just want to tear off my face

H: I hide the pain behind a fake smile
No one sees the truth in me
That I can't wait to die
That I lost my self in hate long ago


My heart is screaming
But there's too many meanings
In tangled within these dark feelings
I just want to go away

H:I peer into my own soul
And see the emptiness that taints me
Separates me from the world
I want no need to feel , something…. Anything…


But there's nothing
Its life there's no heroes who can save us
No "god" in sight
So I ask myself why fight?



I Hate by ZK and Halen


I hate you mother
Even though you gave birth to me
For 20 years we share nothing
But the blood you gave me

I hate you father
You threw me away
But now I'll be better than ever
What I'll reach you'll never see


I hate you mother
You gave me 5 brothers but NOT love
You abandoned me, I've had enough
I cant stay waiting for you

I hate you father
Never having your love,
I grew away from all emotion
I just simply don't care


I hate you mother
You said I was ugly
I didn't mean anything to you
I feel like a fool but no more F%^$ You!

I hate you father
You ruin the lives you touched
But starting today I won't be one of them
I have just one last thing to say, F*** You

Edited by Zero King, 31 August 2012 - 10:22 PM.


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Wow.
Sadly, I used to feel like that, a long time ago.
Especially that last one.. minus the five brothers.
But still, the poems are good.
I give props, and tell Halen I said job well done as well.

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Thanks Maia, I will

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Not bad both of you, although that's very harsh, remember hatred only gives birth to more hatred :(

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I see why you're so good at writing dark stories now.

Good poems, it's a shame that without personal experience the raw emotion of the poems probably wouldn't have felt as harsh or real.

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Frost: Thank you, I try to put my emotions into everything I write.

Luna: we don't hate them anyone, we just don't feel anything for them not hate and not love. I hate was like the final goodbye, they don't matter anymore.


A quick solo poem by me

My eyes are dry,
I want to cry.
I'm still alive,
Can't I die.
Everyday I try,
These are lies.

Edited by Zero King, 01 September 2012 - 11:28 PM.


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Questions

If I died
Will everything be fixed?
Would you be happy?
If I stopped breathing
Would you cry?



Confused

I can't stop these tears
Everyday I fight my fears
I'm so tired, I just want to live life
Yet I want to die
What's the truth?, what's the lie?

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So complex, yet, simple in its complexity.
Again,more emotion filled poems that I like.
You always seem to know how to pull the heartstrings, Zero-kun.
Great job.

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Thank you maia :)

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You're welcome Zero-kun! >^.^<

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Walk away

If you guys were not here
I would just walk away
I'm at the end of my rope
Is there any hope?
I want to walk away

Am i doing this for me?
Would you walk away?
why can't i see the real me?
Can't I just walk away
Without you theres no reason to stay
I just want to walk away

Slave to myself

God dam it why can't I see the real me?
I'm so fucking tired of lieing
I feel like I'm slowly dieing
I would be crying if i wasnt here
not because I'm losing
but because I've disappointed you

I'm really only doing this for you
because I can't see what I want to be?
When will I ever be free?
Can anyone tell me?
Can anyone set me free?

Edited by Zero King, 08 September 2012 - 12:27 AM.


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Damn, Zero-kun, you did it again!
You're really good at this.
Fuu~~~
Such emotions you display...
MOAR!!! Hee hee

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Thank you Maia it means a lot

These are from early Last Month

A Sick Love

I don't know but I love you
I feel so hot when I'm next to you
And when you take the knife across their throats
I get so crazy for you

I know this is a sick love
But I just can't get enough
I love the way you look drenched in blood
The way you kill over a petty grudge

Oh I so love my twisted desire
Give me more I'm addicted to you
Come on! Come on! Show me more
You know there's no stopping the gore



I wrote this after someone told me a real life story,
Living a Fantasy

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Dam, really good poems Zero

I really liked your "walk away" and "slave to myself" poems I think I could relate a bit to them.
And the emotions!

Man your "living a fantasy poem" was pretty messed up, I mean for that person not the poem, good poem.

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I don't know why, but I actually laughed with the first one.
It was good.

Damn, that is so not cool.
I can understand why the person in the poem would feel like that though, and I can't really blame him.
Seriously a messed up situation.
And I agree totally with Frost, it was a good poem.

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Thank you frost and maia. Im glad you really liked both, I poured a lot emotion into slave to myself and walk away.

Living a fantasy situation is a little messed up

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Walk away

If you guys were not here
I would just walk away
I'm at the end of my rope
Is there any hope?
I want to walk away

Am i doing this for me?
Would you walk away?
why can't i see the real me?
Can't I just walk away
Without you theres no reason to stay
I just want to walk away

Slave to myself

God dam it why can't I see the real me?
I'm so fucking tired of lieing
I feel like I'm slowly dieing
I would be crying if i wasnt here
not because I'm losing
but because I've disappointed you

I'm really only doing this for you
because I can't see what I want to be?
When will I ever be free?
Can anyone tell me?
Can anyone set me free?


as I have known you quite literally my entire life, and I have watched you grow as a person
I have come to realize that you hide behind this mask of indifference
but in reality your in pain, a pain beyond what many have and will experience in their lives.
I know all you have triumphed over in your life and hope that you see in yourself what I and many others
see in you....

Sometime I see that you want to cry
Your pain is hidden in the silence
You taught me to feel again
maybe I can teach you to heal
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I agree with Halen.
You really should have more confidence in yourself, Zero.
I can see the talent and potential that you have, so, you should believe in yourself too.
>^.^<

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Thank you Maia, i will try to have more confidence in myself and I will try to believe in myself as well.

Halen that is a very sentimental poem thank you. Also thank you for telling me that, I agree with you.

Peace

I don't want to go home
I hate it here
I'm surrounded but so alone
I can't escape this place
You can't tell by my face
Since i always lie
I wander if peace will find me
If I die...

Poser
You are a poser
Do you think we want to feel this way?
Life is so hard we are left with scars
While your in your big house with 4 fancy cars
Crying like a bitch go ahead slit your wrists
Hold on let me give you a hand
What are you crying for?
Isn't this what you wanted?
You take your easy life for granted
What do you have to complain for?
Your dad buys everything you want and need
Your whole family is the defintion of greed
Then why are screaming about killing yourself to me!?






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Actually its mom
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