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Chapter 1 - Third-rate English Translation


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I've made a few revisions. Modified some of the language (changed some words, extended sentences to add details, worded differently from literal translation) so it makes more sense in English so that some of the notes aren't needed. i.e Where he says "I'll be your first friend, okay?" - The original literally translates to "I'll be your number 1 friend, okay?" - in English that can be seen as 'best friend' while the line's intention was 'first friend.'

A group is working on this manga. I may clear this post when they release it since it will likely be more accurate.

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I'll note that I speak English as a first language and my French is mainly educated rather than learned from being among them. Also this is a third generation translation. It went from Japanese to French to English so some things may have been lost in the process.

Those said, I stumbled a bit on a few things and this is the best I could do but it should give you a good enough grasp on it until someone/a group does it better.

Text form. So open up the comic in another window and follow along.

Written following the Japanese reading order.

Chapter 1: The World Saves You

----- 5 -----

<<My name is Hiro Harusawa, age 16.>>

<<The loud girl.>>

<<The annoying girl who is always nagging.>>

<<The Avenger.>> The used word is a general term for law abiding good doer. So I went with The Avenger since it's supposed to be a nickname for her.

<<That's what everyone calls me.>>

“Hey you!”

“You can't sit there! Move it!”

“Oh crap! The Avenger!”

----- 6 -----

“Move Shiina! Get up!”

“This again? You're always acting so high and mighty!”

“I'm not acting high and mighty. The school rules say you can't sit there so I'm giving you a warning.”

“Yeah yeah. I get it.”

“I'm going.”

[I can't stand wrong-doing.]

[When people misbehave I confront them about it, but no one likes that sort of criticism. That's why I have neither a friend or boyfriend.]

[I have no one to speak my heart to.]

“Ah! The Avenger!”

“Shh! You'll get scolded!”

("If you aren't misbehaving I won't say anything.")

----- 7 -----

“Woah! It's Class C.”

“The bad boys.”

"The other day my friend met eyes with them and they insulted her."

Get outta here! In the “No way, is that true?” kind of way.

----- 8 -----

“Woah! What are you doing Ryo?!

“You made a mess!”

“We're heading out!”

“There was a number of people in the hall when you did that!”

----- 9 -----

"You're not the only one in the school! Don't do it again!"

“Goodbye!”

----- 10 -----

“Wow! So cool!”

“Hey! Should we both get one?”

“Let's do it!”

“SO GOOD!”

----- 11 -----

[Huh?]

[That guy... is... the one from earlier.]

[Is he following me?]

[Is he angry because I scolded him before?]

[Does he want me to take it back?]

[All he had to do was say it to my face!]

“Hey...”

----- 12 -----

[Huh?]

“Tell me your name!”

“WHAAAAAAA!”

“Tell me your name!”

"My... my name?! W... Why!?"

“Why are you asking that so s...suddenly.”

----- 13 -----

“I want to be friends!”

“Give me your number!”

“Wha... you want...?”

“I've decided that we will be friends!”

----- 14 -----

“I really liked how you yelled at me before!”

“I'm a masochist.”

“Your name is Hiro Harusawa, right? Ah!”

“And I'm Ryo Hamazaki. Nice to meet you!”

“Ah crap!. I have to get to work!”

“Later!”

[What...]

----- 15 -----

[What just happened?]

“One... Two... Three hundred and twenty Euros.”

“Alright I've got it all.”

“Thanks again Ryo.”

“I knew you'd work hard for us.”

*Become friends!*

[It can't be!]

[He must have the wrong person!]

----- 16 -----

("I didn't reply to any of his messages.")

[Become friends... This is...]

“HIRO!!!”

“Why didn't you reply?”

“Even though I sent you a ton of messages!”

What? What did he say?

“C... come here for a second”

“What's your problem?”

“I should be asking that! You didn't answer my messages!”

"That's because you took my number without permission. And you're the only one taking this seriously."

“That's because we're friends!”

“I don't think we can be friends.”

----- 17 -----

“I don't have any friends.”

“That's why is bothers me when you suddenly say we're friends...

“In that case!”

“I'll be your first friend, okay?!”

“Uh.. are you listening?”

“I'm so happy!”

[What...]

----- 18 -----

[What's with … this guy?]

“Hey you!”

“You can't play in this area. Go out to the field."

"Hmm? Was that The Avenger?”

“She's not as harsh as usual...”

----- 19 -----

("This is so trivial... I think I'm going to go crazy...”)

“Let's have lunch together!”

“Nothing you do surprises me anymore.”

“Is that your lunch?”

“Yep! It's my favourite!”

“Do you always have that for lunch?”

"Yes! I love it! You want some?"

“You can have this.”

----- 20 -----

“.. what?”

“You are still young so you have to eat well. This is how you become an adult.”

He looks quite happy...

“You're weird.”

“Who? Me?”

“Yes, you.”

“No one's ever said he wanted to be friends with me.”

“I told you yesterday! I really liked it when you yelled at me!”

----- 21 -----

“But... I wonder if we can talk more intimately.”

“You'd never get that far!”

“I was joking!”

“I wasn't.”

“What are you doing?”

“Well... I'm imitating you.”

“The bell's going to ring soon.”

"Let's go."

----- 22 -----

“See that? Look over there! Isn't that The Avenger and Ryo from Class C?”

“What are they doing together?”

“That's a strange combination.”

“They get along?”

“What? When did The Avenger stop being a loner?

“And what is Hiro doing with a guy from class C?"

----- 23 -----

“Shina”

“You shouldn't hang out with just anyone.”

“How's it going, Shina?”

“You stay out of this! Dammit!”

“I'm not causing any trouble being here.”

“Rather, aren't you the one creating a commotion?”

“I'm going to kill you!”

“Whoa!”

“STOP IT!”

“He's not.”

"a bad person."

----- 24 -----

“Oh yeah!?

“She's scary!”

----- 25 -----

"Kyaah!”

“Oh no!”

“No!”

“Don't expect me to put even one foot in the water!”

“You're no fun!”

“Thank you for earlier.”

“Wait a moment.”

“Here!”

----- 26 -----

“What's this?”

“A Crêpe! I saw you drooling while watching those girls eat them!”

“We're not supposed to eat after class.”

“What...?”

“But thanks.”

“I haven't always been a loner. I had a friend before.”

“Hmm?”

----- 27 -----

“A girl who was bullied at school. I liked her, but one day she said:”

<< What happened? Did somebody hurt you? >>

<< Hiro... >>

<< I can't play with you anymore...>>

<< I can't be with you anymore... >>

“I took her words to heart and left her alone. For years I've regretted doing that instead of supporting her.”

“So when I see people bullying or misbehaving I confront them about it.”

“That's all in the past now.”

"That girl... do you know if she's alright now?”

“She's fine. It's Shiina.”

----- 28 -----

“Ah so it's Shiina.”

“WHAT?!”

“Shiina was my friend back then in school.”

“When you say 'Shiina', you mean the one from before?”

“Yes. We were very close.”

“I see... so that's it. In that case, I also have a confession to make.”

“Huh? You don't have to!”

“I give money to the guys in Class C.”

“Why?”

"Bah.... So they will let me stay."

I give them money, they let me hang out with them.

“That's why I work part-time.”

----- 29 -----

“OW...”

“Why are you doing that? Are you stupid or something? You can't buy friendship!”

“Waah! Waah!”

"Calm down!"

“How much have you given them until now?”

“Huh... what? A book? Why?”

“I'm going to tell them to give your money back!”

“What? You don't have to!”

“Tell me all the transactions! Now!”

“One at a time.”

“Uh...The first time I gave them 250€.”

"The next time I asked how much they wanted, it was 400€."

“One wanted to get a gift for his girlfriend which was about 100€.”

"We walk around for a bit every day and I spend about 300€ or 500€."

“And then?”

“Then...”

----- 30 -----

"Hiro..."

----- 31 -----

“Ryo isn't here. He may be late?

“Ah. I see.”

----- 32 -----

“Oh wait. He's here. Ryo!”

“Hello."

"I made a packed lunch. And about yesterday, I can...”

“Sorry."

"I don't want to be your friend, Hiro.”

----- 33 -----

“Ah! Ryo's here.

“You're late dumbass!”

“Hey! Avenger! Our ball landed in the garden. Why aren't you saying anything?”

“The Avenger is all by herself.”

“I wonder why she's not with Ryo.”

“I dunno!”

----- 34 -----

[Perhaps he wasn't sincere.]

[I don't know why he wouldn't look me in the eye.]

“You opened up to me yesterday...”

[I...]

“Oh yeah, I never read his messages.”

“I'll read them before I delete them.”

[… started to open up too.]

Hiro. Sorry I made you cry. I'm glad I had an open heart talk with you. I'll do it alone. I can solve my own problems.

----- 35 -----

One last thing: Thank you for being my friend even if it didn't last long. - Ryo.

“I haven't told him.”

“Uwah!"

"Why are you in such a hurry?”

“Shiina... why?”

“I came to get something I forgot. Why are you crying?”

----- 36 -----

“It's nothing. Excuse me.”

“Um..."

"Shiina...”

“What?”

“The reason you didn't talk to me."

"Was it to protect me?..”

“You didn't want me to be bullied because of you?...”

“You were"

"precious to me.”

----- 37 -----

“I didn't think you'd always be alone.”

“Even if we weren't together.”

“I never stopped"

"thinking about you.”

“Ryo!! Come and play with us!”

----- 38 -----

“It's no fun if you're not having fun with us, Ryo.”

“Let's go somewhere else to play.”

“Ah yeah! Let's go do karaoke!”

I'm coming to save you!

“But we don't have any money. You have that covered, right Ryo?”

“...You aren't my friends.”

“What? What did you say?”

“Wha! Who's this girl?”

----- 39 -----

“Let him go!”

“Hey! What do you want?”

"... Hiro"

“Leave Ryo alone!”

“Ah! This girl is giving me a headache!”

“I came here but I still couldn't help him!”

“Don't hurt my friend!”

----- 40 -----

“It doesn't matter if you don't pay me back the money, but I'm not hanging around you anymore!”

“We'll see about that!”

“You became my friend and then left me so easily!”

"You think you can do whatever you want?..."

----- 41 -----

“... Sorry.”

“I thought I'd just be a burden to you, sorry.”

“It's nothing.”

“I didn't really want to leave you.”

“I know”

"Even though the two of us haven't really done anything. I just want to be your friend."

"Yeah. I understand."

“But uh...”

“This position is...”

----- 42 -----

“Whaaa!

“Wha... whaaa... sorry!!! You okay?

"I... I'm fine! Calm down!"

“…Sorry I held on to you like that.”

“I had a sudden urge to hold you close to me...”

----- 43 -----

“We are friends and yet... my heart is pounding.”

So the masochist thing... I'm assuming that was just an abstract reason to get them together and we'll never hear about it again.

Edited by anime1337, 07 August 2012 - 05:39 PM.


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