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This was actually a dream i had, were i was reading a good book at a kick ass house party, the book was so intrusting that i ignored the whole party and kept reading, I forgot the title but thought these titles would be good "Utopias Cracks" or "Utopian Cracks" the plot was like this
:Earth has achieved a utopian society were everyone is happy and well fed, they have security, piece, understanding, acceptance and tolerance, no crime, no war, no disease, when everyone can easily live past 120 years old.

At push of a button of your personal handheld wireless devices, you are entertained 24/7 and in constant communication with everyone everywhere, a voice command to your robotic servant has it do all your tasks for you, and the ultimate invention to make this all possible the mandatory government prescription pill for everyone "Annaxiacole preoccupus layzineion" which keeps everyone calm and pacified, truly this is the golden age for Earth and all humanity, now it's all down hill from here.

I only got to the end of the first chapter in my dream and it went like this:
Keyser Söze (forgot the main dudes name in my dream, so i put this one cuz it's cool) born and raised in London under the local earth education system, typical teenager just graduated from high school ,top marks and popular, as with everyone, is on the drug.
Is on the local and last Karate dojo with few members, he's competing at the last continental tournament in the whole E.U. under a soon to be new law that forbids contact sports.

On his first bout as soon the ref says "fight" a 2 story high robot from a construction site near by bursts through the wall behind the spectators killing some and injuring more, but the robot only attacks the instructors and students, killing all but three, these 3 escape together, Keyser Söze, a 9 year old girl Aoi and the guy he was going to fight a 16 year old Russian named Vladimir.

As they are running down the street the robot busts out of the gym, moving like a living thing rather then a robot saying "I'm gonna get you" and "you can't run from me forever", they split up Keyser Söze(that name is just cool to say)runs into a city park with the robot after him as it throws a bolder, just knocking the wind out of him, with adrenaline running through his body which overruns the effects of the drug, for the first time in his life he feels fear, one of the many emotions suppressed by the drug.

anyways as much as he runs he loses energy, he collapses at the mercy of the robot, just b4 it's going to kill him it says "I'm going to enjoy feasting on your soul!", then several human sized robots appear from the sky and quickly take down the bezerk robot then he passes out from exhaustion, he wakes up the next day in the hospital, sore but fine and must stay a week, by the time he gets out he's back on the drug and the whole incident is forgotten by everyone, friends and family alike, he walks by an empty lot were the gym used to be and feels dizzy, like his mind is trying to remember something and pops another pill as instructed by his doctor.

He shakes it off as a dream until he reaches a construction site were he sees the exact same robot with the blood stains still on it working like nothing happened, all the suppressed memories from the incident come flooding back to make him puke the last pill that he took and starts to feel fear once more with a new emotion "grief or loss" takes a look at the robot and starts to run on instinct.

He runs far and long only to stop to look behind him and see nothing after him, and another emotion hits him "relief" , then he starts laughing though he knows not the reason, he hears a familiar voice Aoi's father, he stopped on there front yard and was told to come inside since it was soon to rain, they talk for some time then Aoi's father asks Keyser if he can help with Aoi's problem of not taking her pills he thinks she feels lonely cause no one from the dojo visits her anymore, he has forgotten the fact that they were all killed like everyone else and says she is in the back yard practicing.

Keyser goes to see Aoi, she's practicing karate until she see's Keyser, she does a running jump attack hug on him and starts crying hard, her father say's "i think she's sick cuz her eyes keep leaking like that" as soon as Keyser hears that he hugs Aoi back and starts crying hard as well, for the first time in his life he feels "sorrow" and he knows that it's right somehow, then it starts to rain.

Action, Adventure, Fantasy, Horror, Martial Arts, Mystery, Psychological, Sci-fi, Seinen, Supernatural, Tragedy.

remember this was a book i read in a dream i had, the main points are religion is completely outlawed, priests, imams, Buddhist are all underground as well as there counterparts, demon worshipers, Satanist, witches, some witches are neutral and the government is against all of them so if they are caught, they are brought to a brainwashing facility which actually twists there souls and are heavily drugged.

the drug is the main plot of the story, it actually stops all contact from the soul to the body and mind, somehow making the barrier between heaven, earth, and hell to weaken causing demonic and angelic powers to easily slip into earth realm, the berserk robot was actually controlled by a demon that was trying to kill anyone that can fight back against humans controlled by demons.

I can try to make the story more intrusting from here, but i am very bad at writing and grammar if you want to help just send me a message, if anyone wants to take this idea and run with it message me, like i said i'm not good at this but I'll do my best.

I've posted this on the Mangafox form were a writer tried to do it but stopped there name was "Almari"





I have an idea of the whole story but dialogue I'm very bad at.

[theroadstopshere]

Interesting concept, although I admit you lost me completely when the robot appeared. I would be happy to write something for this if you'd let me. It would probably be a bit different, though, with less focus on heaven/hell/souls and more on the dystopian society itself. The robot would be the same, but instead of a demon-controlled one it would be one reprogrammed by anti-government terrorists (possibly from one of the repressed religions?). Let me know what you think.
Really good idea though, you should try to dream more often.