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[truepurple]

     Supposedly a loving couple. But she asks him to marry her on sight. Supposedly because he is unafraid of her, but she seems to keep everything from him.  So this tough and tough minded woman decides to marry a man solely based on looks at first sight? It's a question whether he even knows of her gangster past, which brings us to point number two.

 

     The story really should have told us something about their relationship and about the husband before this point, it's hard to care  about a character we haven't really met.

 

     Keeping everything from him is not only disrespectful to their marriage (and something he should have known before marriage), but dangerous to him. Especially bad was hiding the arrow from him, and then allowing him to go unguarded to work the next day completely ignorant of the risks he now faces. Yeah yeah, she's so tough that she figured some word passed along the underground would be enough. But if it were enough, then who she is period would have been enough.

 

     Trying to kill him, and trying to kidnap him are different things belonging to different objectives. This alone should be absolute proof something is amiss. Just barging into a gang and giving a warning to a Bigfoot, would not be sufficient. If they kill him, attempt to kill him, or pretend to attempt to kill him, that means she is the one getting a message delivered to her, what kind of idiotic gangster would ignore such a important message so completely. If they kidnap him, and let her know, that means they want to use him as leverage to get her to do something.

 

     And if they demand nothing and leave a fire symbol, maybe they want her to destroy a faction with fire in their name for them. Intentionally leaving a mark, obviously could be a lie and probably is. No demands but owning up to the kidnapping, maybe that is a lie trying to direct her anger to do something for them. It's a easy conclusion to reach for anyone not a idiot. Seriously, attack everyone with fire in their name because the culprits left a fire symbol, how stupid can you be. And if these folks were this dumb, how could they keep a organization going, even being so supernaturally strong.

 

     And the supernatural level exaggeration of everything in a world without direct apparent supernatural elements is annoying too.  There should be a limit to how bombastic the author gets. For example, when that big guy punches her and she blocks it without bracing herself and the tattoos appear out of nowhere, and during it all, the exaggeration between there sizes is so extreme that you got to wonder how she reaches steering wheels to drive being such a midget, and/or how he fits into buildings, being such a literal giant. At least they avoid hollering the names of attacks all the time, but they do seem to have Korean versions of "pow" etc for every attack. Also there is a weight issue, if anyone were so strong as that giant guy supposedly was, no matter how supernaturally strong you were, you would still be sent flying with a punch from such a person, you'd need something to push against to counter the kinetic energy. Otherwise you may remain perfectly unharmed and upright, but you'd still be in the air, like clobbering a statue made of adamantium that isn't tied down. I understand stories don't need to be preciously realistic, but there should be a limit.

Edited by truepurple, 28 October 2017 - 05:59 AM.