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Loli Mamoritai

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Greeting Everyone. I'm the translator of Isekai Izakaya Nobu manga.

 

I'm start this topic because I need your help with proof-read.

 

As for now, Chapter 3 have a lot of suggestion, I will choose the best one in all of them and fix.

 

Expected Chapter 3 version 4 will release soon.


I'm re-do chapter 4 and half-way done.

I will upload the images / chapter 4 here soon.

 

Anyone can proof-read please help me, so we can have better chapter to read.


Edited by Loli Mamoritai, 04 May 2016 - 03:47 AM.

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Can you post the script to make it easier to proofread for future chapters?


Edited by TheDefend, 04 May 2016 - 08:50 AM.


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Can you post the script to make it easier to proofread for future chapters?

 

Will do, with the future chapters.


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1. Once you start snacking on pickled cabbage, it's easy to get addicted to.

2. Isn't that right, mister?

3. It's certainly an interesting cuisine, young lady.

4. But, in a city rich with history like ours, the cuisine in this restaurant is a bit ... plain.

5. Really?

6. I think having tasty food is good enough.

7. Well, well, a waitress lacking in culture wouldn't be able to understand.

8. Oh well. By the way, why isn't the chef here?

9. He went out to buy ingredients. It might take him a while to get back.

10. While you wait, why don't I cook something up for you, mister?

11. I'm fine.

12. Just get me more of this cabbage.

13. This man's name is Gernot.

14. His job is a Zamindar.

15. They are commissioned by the city council to collect taxes.

16. Because if they want to collect the taxes from people, the most successful way is to hire someone to collect it in person.

17. Of course, payment still depends on the capability of the collector.

18. Even so, if we leave jobs like this to people good at accounting, like Gernot, then everything can be finished smoothly.

19. Then again, even after you collect all the money owed, your payment is meager.

20. That's why tax collectors that take commission, like Gernot, take advantage of people's weaknesses to swindle them.

21. This is reality. All this is for one purpose, making people pay more taxes.

22. The surplus would make its way into their pockets.

23. ... This is the tax collectors' commission.

24. For people good at scheming, they may be able to collect two or even three times the amount owed.

25. With the money they pocket, they could even build a magnificent mansion.

26. And to that end, today ...

27. Gernot is targeting this place, Restaurant "Nobu".

28. I don't know when this restaurant opened ...

29. But, I did hear a lot of chatter about it from the soldiers.

30. Maybe I can take all the earnings from this place ...

31. No ... Once I pick a good target, I have to at least get two or three times it.

32. ... Wait let's not think about that yet ...

33. Just why is this cabbage ...

34. ... So addictive?

35. Not only can I not stop eating, I can't stop drinking as well. I've already drank more than five glassfuls of beer. Is it because I was eating this cabbage while drinking?

36. I only planned to check this restaurant then go home right away. Oh well ... Since I stayed I think I'll try eating here.

37. Young lady, does this restaurant have any specialties?

38. In this restaurant every dish is special.

39. All of our meat, seafood, and vegetarian dishes.

40. Seafood? You even have fish in this restaurant?

41. Yes.

42. Ah, but the chef isn't here so I can't serve you most of the dishes.

43. In this city, it's rare for a restaurant to serve seafood.

44. Do you like seafood, mister?

45. The fish is this area are of poor quality.

46. Also, I haven't seen the cooking skill of this restaurant, so ordering seafood if dangerous.

47. Even considering it, is stupid.

48. No, I don't feel like eating seafood.

49. Give me a portion of roast pork. (???)

50. Or grilled beef. (???)

51. Is there something boiling in that pot of water?

52. Hey, young lady.

53. What is that?

54. If I'm not guessing wrong ...

55. It's pasta right?

56. Yes, it's pasta.

57. Sell, me that pasta.

58. Eh?

59. But ... this pasta is mine ...

60. And we don't sell pasta here.

61. This is a place that sells food ...

62. And I am a customer here.

63. Yes.

64. Everything is as you said.

65. Then I order food, so just sell me that pasta.

66. But, are you really okay with this?

67. I don't really have any issues with this ...

68. And I'm the one who has to cook it, and I can't do anything to complicated.

69. I'm fine with that, just cook it however you like.

70. Alright, then I'll make a naporitan.

71. Napo ... ?

72. Oh well, it's just pasta, it can't be that bad.

73. Pasta ... When I was a child I ate it almost every day. ...

74. But after getting this job, I haven't returned home even once ...

75. This is a chance to enjoy the flavors of home again.

76. Fu ... fu ... I came here to make money, but end up ordering a meal.

77. It's done, mister.

78. So very, very RED?

79. Young lady ... ?

80. This is ... ?

81. Why is ... ?

82. Dear, customer.

83. This dish ...

84. is kind of like spaghetti.

85. It's called naporitan.

86. ...

87. So red.

88. Why is it red like this ... ?

89. The color is from tomatoes, right? But why is it so vivid?

90. Not even bolognese or puttanesca are as red as this.

91. The ingredients are all so normal ...

92. Bell peppers, onions, and salted pork.

93. Even so, it's been a long time since I've seen vegetables as fresh as these.

94. Hmmm ... The salted pork is cut very thickly.

95. Ah, you caught me.

96. That pork was supposed to be used for one of the chef's side dishes.

97. How nice ... The chef of this restaurant seems o be well off.

98. A big catch ...

99. Well, let's taste it.

100. Hm? It's sweet ... ?

101. No, it's not simply sweet ...

102. ... The tomatoes' sourness also mixes well with the pasta.

103. These tomatoes have been cooked perfectly.

104. Their taste lingers between each bite ...

105. This young lady isn't just a simple waitress.

106. But looking at the dish as a whole, it's flavor is too childish.

107. People of my stature should never eat food like this.

108. And yet ...

109. ... This flavor seems perfectly suitable to my mouth.

110. Ahhh ...

111. Why don't you try it with some cheese and Tabasco sauce.

112. Cheese and Tabasco sauce?

113. Yes, you can add them in any amount you like.

114. This is, grated cheese?

115. Let's see.

116. !

117. Hmmm ... Adding cheese to tomatoes ...

118. I see ... This is a very interesting combination of flavors.

119. Now why don't you try adding in some Tabasco sauce.

120. Ahhh ... It's spicy, so just try a little bit.

121. Spicy?

122. Yes, just like mustard.

123. Tomatoes have a sweet and sour taste, so adding cheese will make it milder ... But why add in a spicy flavor as well?

124. Won't the flavors clash with each other?

125. The sauce is more than just spicy.

126. She is the one who cooked this naporitan ...

127. Maybe I should listen to her ...

128. Ah, a little, just a little.

129. Now please, mix it all together.

130. !?

131. The meaning ...

132. ... of life ...

133. ... of the universe ...

134. ... This is the answer!---

135. The flavors are all in harmony; the sweetness, the sourness, the spiciness, all melting in my mouth.

136. The slightly bitter bell peppers, the mild onions ...

137. And the salty pork ...

138. This really is a miracle ...

139. A love that only (the) god(s) can bestow.

140. How shameful! How could I dare call this flavor childish?!

141. This is the bittersweet flavor that reminds you of a life well lived.

142. The sweet, care-free days as a child.

143. The sourness that comes with adulthood.

144. The spicy, collected man that I am today.

145. All of this is captured in ...

146. ...This naporitan.

147. Thanks to this flavor, a part of me I left long ago ...

148. Has at last, come back to me.

149. ...

150. Even this empty dish ...

151. Teaches me about the nuances of life as a human.

152. Mister ... You ate very quickly. Could it be you were very hungry.

153. Ahhh ...

154. No ... Not in that sense.

155. I will leave the money here.

156. Ah ... A gold coin?

157. But, I can't make change right now.

158. That's alright, you can keep the change.

159. Yes? But ...

160. I'll be taking my leave now.

161. You don't need to meet with the chef anymore?

162. It's okay.

163. Actually the naporitan was very good.

164. Thank you, young lady.

165. Ah, mister ...

166. Please wait ...

167. Maybe I should leave this job. It just makes everyone hate you.

168. All the money I've saved until now ... I'll donate it to people in need.

169. Going back home sounds good too.

170. I'll go and find the man I used to be.

171. Maybe I'm being foolish, but I feel like everyone would greet me with a smile.

172. Today, the world feels like a more gentle place.

173. My mind feels so refreshed.

174. Thank you "Nobu".

175. Thank you naporitan.

176. Ah, I can't see him anymore ...

177. ... And, he still has tomato sauce on his face.

178. I'm back, Shinobu.

179. Ah, chef, you're back.

180. Did we have any customers?

181. Ah ... yes. He left just now.

And this took longer than I expected.


Edited by Bravee-NEX, 04 May 2016 - 09:17 AM.


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Chapter 4 

   + page 5:

 

- the menu is extensive, Payment clarity

- good manner, polite and good service.

- i’m sure this restaurant...

-  will sastify Hildegard, niece of mine, Johan Gustav.

 

 

   + page 6:

 

- have you decided, dear customers ?

- let see...

- Hildegard, what do you like?

- may i have a tasty dish, isn’t fishy, isn’t spicy, isn’t sour, isn’t bitter, isn’t hard and wasn’t bread, potato, rice soup, egg or stew.

- here we go again.

 

   + Page 7

 

-  hey, Hildegard, you are already twelve years old. you must know in this city during this season don’t have ingridient as you requested.

- oh my... you are the one who said this restaurant is really special.

- if they can’t do it, it mean they are no different from other one.

- Hildegard...

- don’t be hard on me like that.

- we can do it.

- Hah ?

- what did you just say ?


     + Page 8

 

-  you want "a tasty dish, isn’t fishy, isn’t spicy, isn’t sour, isn’t bitter, isn’t hard, and wasn’t bread, potato, rice soup, egg or stew" , isn’t that right ?

- please wait a moment, dear customers.

- they can ?

- she said “they can do it”, right ?

- even she is still just a kid, but my niece, Hildegard is a noble lady, and the heir of family.

- she is also a picky eater, that’s why it’s hard to sastify her.

- uncle, do you know what dish will they serve ?

- ha...ha ha. don’t worry, just wait and see.


     + Page 9

 

- my niece always request unreasonable dish, making it difficult for the chef.

- at best, they can only serve dish quite similar as her requested.

- they’re simple agree but even i don’t know what food they can serve...?

- i'm so worry that they let me down this time.

- the waitress and her husband, the chef aren’t worry at all.

- i heard rumor about this restaurant that’s why i came here.

- i think i will believe in them...

- allow me, dear customers.


    + Page 10

 

- now i will turn on the fire, so please becareful.

-  Ohh...!

- what’re you plan to do with this ?

- i will put this pot on it.


* To be continue * mid-night in my place and i'm sleepy.


Edited by Loli Mamoritai, 04 May 2016 - 04:39 PM.

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CHAPTER 4 proofreading

 

 

Here's a simple proofread version for chapter 4 covered by the spoiler tag. It should suffice.

 

 

Spoiler

Edited by tlst9999, 04 May 2016 - 05:50 PM.


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Full script plz