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[Sui]

Moon on Water

I stretched out my arms in full might,
Hoping to grasp that wondrous light
Although these hands weren't enough
To deserve the moon’s placid laugh

I crossed the moon on cold water
Then waves formed and moved aflutter
Ripples broke the reflected moon
Alas, the dream had to end this soon

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Water and Wine

My glass was full; I let you have a sip
You asked for more, you drank it all
Plain water was all I could let you nip
I believe you knew ‘twas all I could keep

Such a shame, it wasn't to your liking
Water’s taste won’t ever change in time;
A fool I am for truly believing,
You knew water does not taste like wine

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MIST

I send it through feathers
Each letter, each word,
To a faraway land
For a faceless stranger

I sing a melody
And whisper it to the wind
As he plays by the moonlight,
Joining our heartstrings

Many times I say,
'Tis not but folly
Yet at times I pray,
'Tis love so holy

'Til the day we meet,
Here I shall wait
Though mirth oft fleets,
I'll leave it all to fate

 

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Red Spider Lily

 

Blood-stained petals rise 

whenever summer arrives

and the leaves are gone 

until the cold winter comes

 

The thorny leaves grow 

When the flowers depart

and their short life lasts 

until scorching days come

 

Will there ever come a day 

when the leaves and petals meet?

Such a shame, I can only pray

for their lives not to repeat

 

Must we atone for our sins

like the cursed petals and leaves

and forever be mocked by fate

as we watch red spiders grieve?

Edited by Leez, 03 April 2013 - 01:48 PM.

[greenguy]

response because i wanna increase my post count~

i like the rhymes, i totally thought it was beck's OST lol xD

[Sui]

response because i wanna increase my post count~

i like the rhymes, i totally thought it was beck's OST lol xD

I actually got the title from Moon on the Water xD
But I prefer the female version of the song

[Katzen]

very descriptive, i like it. even though the use of "ain't" threw me off a bit there haha

post more!

[Sui]

very descriptive, i like it. even though the use of "ain't" threw me off a bit there haha

post more!

Thanks. I knew it was a bit weird to use slang on the poem, but I preferred using ain't over aren't for some reason
And yeah, I do intend to post a lot more (the thread title says it all haha)

Edited by Leez, 09 March 2013 - 11:05 PM.

[Diablock]

response because i wanna increase my post count~ i like the rhymes, i totally thought it was beck's OST lol xD

ah also I like the rhymes...

good work~

[Joshua Langford]

Moon on Water

I stretched out my arms in full might,
Hoping to grasp that wondrous light
Although these small hands ain’t enough
To deserve the moon’s placid laugh

I crossed the moon on cold water
Then waves formed and moved aflutter
Ripples broke the reflected moon
Alas, the dream had to end this soon

Spoiler

[Sui]

Spoiler

LOL at the manly tears

[lunacat]

Moon on Water

I stretched out my arms in full might,
Hoping to grasp that wondrous light
Although these small hands ain’t enough
To deserve the moon’s placid laugh

I crossed the moon on cold water
Then waves formed and moved aflutter
Ripples broke the reflected moon
Alas, the dream had to end this soon

brilliant! I loved it.
The best poem I've read in this forum.

[Angelo.]

felt like i was dreaming when reading this nice poem!

[Sui]

felt like i was dreaming when reading this nice poem!

brilliant! I loved it.
The best poem I've read in this forum.

oh stop it you guys

Jokes aside, thank you for the wonderful comments, but saying that it's the best on the forum is an exaggeration. I just read your poems and "By the River" completely blew me away

[animerebel4]

~la Luna~.....Your poems are amazing!!!!! please post more soon!!!!!!!!!!!!! xD

[lunacat]

oh stop it you guys

Jokes aside, thank you for the wonderful comments, but saying that it's the best on the forum is an exaggeration. I just read your poems and "By the River" completely blew me away

Believe me, I do not like to exaggerate about such things, this poem is brilliantly made, I congratulate you on such talent. Don't hesitate to write more, I'll be waiting for them
and am glad you liked my poem, thank you

[Sui]

Red Spider Lily

 

Blood-stained petals rise 

whenever summer arrives

and the leaves are gone 

until the cold winter comes

 

 

The thorny leaves grow 

When the flowers depart

and their short life lasts 

until scorching days come

 

 

Will there ever come a day 

when the leaves and petals meet?

Such a shame, I can only pray

for their lives not to repeat

 

 

Must we atone for our sins

like the cursed petals and leaves

and forever be mocked by fate

as we watch red spiders grieve?

[Zero King]

very nice poems

[Sui]

very nice poems

 

Thank you   

[Pearlday]

You are pretty good. I Like 'em