The Strings Dolls

First off, the characters seem to meet a little too fast and the murders are almost glazed over. You hardly get to know them or settle into a current problem/situation before they are on to the next. With a thriller you do want faster pace but this just felt a bit off. I  would have also really liked to have seen more doll powers explored and also get answers to questions like "how many powers are there?," "how many levels for players?," "is there a purpose for the game besides creating havok?," and "is there an end for the game and if so, is there a winner?" all of which go completely unexplored. Moreover, the incident with the delinquents was dealt with too easily, like for guys who are supposed to be cruel bullies, they forgave and covered very readily. They could have easily made charges of assault if not attempted murder, yet all is good with a sorry. Likewise, with the MC being accused of murder the way he persuaded the cop seemed a bit too smooth and lacked tension. The weakest part of this story though was the villain. You have this whole build up through the chapters of this mysterious ellusive figure who is arranging one death after another yet when you finally meet him, both character and motive falls flat. You are left to essentially just assume he's a crazy guy, which would be fine if the author actually explored his psychosis and its causes more, but nope, its just he's crazy and that's it.

Kiryuu couldn't control Miyavi, considering that he have that lvl2 Overwrite ability. Unless Miya-chan also have Overwrite or some other ability that would counter it, that is.